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suicide,stupid
Contributed by
blackholesun
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Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 11:03:16 AM in AEST
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SUICIDE
suicide the perfect plan,
being yourself not joining the clan.
Suicide an ending note....
tying the knot,hanging the rope.
Suicide razor to wrists,
slashing and gashing who can resist?
Suicide gun to head,no one will care
when i turn up dead!
Suicide why does it matter id rather slit my own throat and hear the blood splatter.
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2004-07-09 11:03:16]
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Re: suicide,stupid
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 11:12:54 AM AEST
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well, its certainly straight to the point.
It isnt the way though...
im glad it failed.
Good write
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: suicide,stupid
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by forever_lonely on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 12:11:16 PM AEST
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Hello and welcome to the site
I like this write is dirct and straight to the poin and pushes your thoughts and emotions across the page,
I like the lines
''Suicide an ending note....
tying the knot,hanging the rope.
Suicide razor to wrists,
slashing and gashing who can resist?''
The simple rhyme scheme pushes across your message with great results
As an emotion poem they dont come much better than this, structurly could uses a few fine tuning but nothing that your prowess doesnt show to be there already
As a note, heart wrentching and gut churning, im glad this was not the way for you, because it would have been a great loss to those that loved you and knew you and those that didnt because we wouldnt be blessed with this kinda of magnitude of a write
Luke |
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Re: suicide,stupid
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by AnastasiaN on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 05:09:24 PM AEST
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| makes sense to me as someone who's tried before but failed cuz it wasn't what i truly wanted. but it gets to the bottom of it... |
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