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On Three
Contributed by
Dupa
on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 07:14:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Your gaze passes away
Over my face
Forgive my cliché
But I’m falling from grace
You lend
Your guilt over to me
So thank you for all of these shadows I see
You tempt, so obviously
I would play your song back
So sweetly indeed
Though you sing-- never for me
I lie
Asleep by your body
I lie, when I pretend that you love me
Your face threads emotion
Needling to my soul
How comforting to feel you
How painful this toll
You cherish
The days that we had
But you know what we are is never again
Never again
Never again
Never
Copyright ©
Dupa
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2004-07-09 07:14:03]
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Re: On Three
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by Luinil on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 07:26:30 AM AEST
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| another beautiful poem.. you're very talented* |
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Re: On Three
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by emystar on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 07:36:14 AM AEST
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Sad, emotional, determined write.
Written wwith power.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: On Three
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by liquidsunshine on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 07:51:20 AM AEST
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Well Dupa, I'm not sure what it is that has drawn me to read this poem, but I really do like it. Very emotional and complex. As a first-time reader of yours, I'll be glad to come again once in a while.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea |
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Re: On Three
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 08:30:20 AM AEST
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I lie
Asleep by your body
I lie, when I pretend that you love me
terrific lines,
nice write. |
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Re: On Three
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by WinterFox on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 09:24:25 AM AEST
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An excellent piece, Dupa..
It's sad when a relationship falls apart..more especially when there is one that still has the love.
Very well expressed...Mike |
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Re: On Three
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 08:24:15 PM AEST
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Yes, it would have been much easier having sometone there to help you push through the pain. You are very talented and I hope you will post your work here so that even though you may destroy the pages you wrote it on, you can't rip them up here. Have them deleted yes, but you cannot in a fit of low esteem towards your poetry destroy such beauty and talent.
Rita |
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Re: On Three
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by Archie on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 10:47:09 PM AEST
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| You seem to posess the gift for writing songs as well as writing poetry. Very good poem. |
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Re: On Three
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 11:28:25 PM AEST
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I love your style!! You have yourself a fan here!!
Keep them coming....
Jenni |
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Re: On Three
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 08:10:26 PM AEST
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I would play your song back
So sweetly indeed
Though you sing-- never for me
Ohhhh sad. This is a lovely write! You've beautifully expressed the pain of a relationship that's a bit heavier on one side than the other. Out of balance love... kind of throws you off kilter. It's bound to happen and I suppose, happens for a reason.
Hoping you find yourself feeling perfectly in balance very soon-
SNM
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