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Etalia's prose
Contributed by
Black13
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Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 09:24:55 PM in AEST
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LIfe...
Illusion of protrusion measured by futility
With didactic words to cover up pain
Never wanting others to know it's fertility
But keeping yourself blockaded in vain
Pain...
Sucking life from a dead childs soul
You beat him until he is no more
And if despair mayhap he'll howl
So you can bury him inside a whore.
Death...
And release shall come home to rest
Suffocating babes with umbilical chords
But will you see a picture best
Or will things fall like unheard words
Illusion...
Know that I have never breathed
Know that I can't let myself leave
Swords once drawn can't be sheathed
Death shows curtains pushed to heave
Love...
Dismembered souls bleed so free
Gunslingers deal only in lead
And still you will never truly see
Find me here and planted seed
Etalia...
She is death of every birthed thing
Goddess demon born in me
Cut lives in burning string
Please come see her be...
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Black13
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 09:27:49 PM AEST
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| Wo.. What a poem...Its got everything... great write... |
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 01:53:52 AM AEST
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Ominous! I think I'll keep a sword nearby as I wait for more.
I like the fluent style, especially the first stanza.
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 05:32:32 PM AEST
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interesting poem (or perhaps it should be referred to as 'prose'?) in any case this was very good and quite haunting if I may say so. Loved it all and the eloquence that u put in here.
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by MoonlitAngel on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 09:25:46 PM AEST
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Wow... I'm not even sure what to say about this. I will say that the first stanza is awesome just coz I relate to it so well. I'm not sure I get the rest of it as well as I get that part, but the images are certainly.... interesting. lol. Can't wait to see the rest. :)
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 12:11:14 AM AEST
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Something between a gasp and a sigh tumbled out when I finished reading this one. The imagery here could be disturbing if it weren't so incredibly perfect in context. "Goddess demon" - Gah! I seriously hope no ex of mine would describe me that way!
Impactful and extraodinarily descriptive. Great write!
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by Stitch on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 10:36:48 AM AEST
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I feel this is definitely the beginning of something. Much more so than then end. I tried to look up Etalia, but couldn't find anything to tell me who she is. This is full of life and death at once. Sad, moving, dark, riveting, and yet somehow looking forward. A very interesting start.
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 12:43:14 AM AEST
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| Six amazing poems..beautifully done..dark and chilling..and also wonderfull..:-) venkat |
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 10:38:58 AM AEST
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| wow... very good write Jeff... hauntingly beautiful. |
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Re: Etalia's prose
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 01:00:13 PM AEST
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This is very good,
very beautiful and reminds me of something but i cant think what..
*shrugs*
A great write.
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