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Finished [Denying Myself]
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:22:53 AM in AEST
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Sorrowful I limp down this path hearing these
Distressed, dissonant cries proclaiming evident dismay
As weeping, chagrined souls pass before my eyes
I am slowly [painfully] raped and relieved of my sight
Now I weap bloodied tears, sightless and useless,
I heal so slowly only to find myself wounded again
Wings of sorrow purge my hardened heart
And I can only stare as I fail, fail, fail
And shake my head with despair as I fall, fall, fall
Gaunt and hungry I plead out of empty eye sockets
With the realization that even love cannot save me
As this rusty knife is plunged through me again, again, and again
Denying myself what is [perhaps] staring me right in the face
Out of simple trepidation of rejection and loss
I stumble along this lonely path alone and tormented
Denying myself the 'pleasures' of a 'normal' life
Aching I blindly curl into a fetal position
And smile as Death waves his scythe dripping with gore
[Die, die, die, death]
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by katyqueen35 on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:30:46 AM AEST
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So much emotion ...
great write.:-) |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by venkat on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:31:09 AM AEST
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| What a breath taking poem!!..totally gripping style and superb expression...Joel.. this is a great read..Venkat |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by the_story_of_the_year on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:52:06 AM AEST
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| So vivid, so real. It's very open to interpretation, which is exactly what a poem needs when it's meant to be shared with others. Well done my friend. |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 02:30:54 AM AEST
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Joel, this is very strong and emotional. I wish you would not deny the pleasures of life as they are the only reward we really get. I don't understand totally so I won't say more. I just wanted to let you know the depth of emotion here and the structure is great.
Rita |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by emystar on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 02:40:05 AM AEST
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Very, very deep!
Hang tuff my friend and remember the rainbow.
luv, huggs, hope, peace,
emy |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 02:48:40 AM AEST
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Wow! Powerful. It impressed itself vividly on my tired mind. Nice work, but very grief-filled.
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 03:40:21 AM AEST
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That certainly is dark. I can relate about now. Yes, I can relate.
Stitch |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 07:43:43 AM AEST
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Gaunt and hungry I plead out of empty eye sockets
With the realization that even love cannot save me
Great emotional write |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by Black13 on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 10:51:19 AM AEST
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Wow... Joel.
This was a really interesting write.
I don't know what to say about it.
I enjoyed it and it was very dark.
I hope everything is still good. |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by pixie on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 12:54:09 PM AEST
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this is powerful, filled with emotion and a terrific write,
pixie xx |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 03:41:28 AM AEST
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As usual Joel you out do yourself, so much emotion, I always wonder how you are able to write such gripping poetry.
Beautiful write mate, so heart wrenching, awesome I like it. |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by slayer_015 on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 03:38:57 PM AEST
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I bow my head with respect.I will see you in print very soon my friend.This is the best poem I've read on this site.I think I'll read a few more of these.You are a great writer.
Brian |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by liquidsunshine on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 06:39:29 PM AEST
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"Gaunt and hungry I plead out of empty eye sockets"
**eyes bug out of head** now THAT is poetry!!! BRAVO!!!
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 04:52:56 PM AEST
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You have a master's ability when you lend your pen to the darkness. This is troubling, frightful, horrible and.......... a masterpiece.
Barkeeper, a drink for my friend
Very well done
Larry |
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Re: Finished [Denying Myself]
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by CrimsonTears on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 11:25:47 PM AEST
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There is so much emotion in this poem its amazing...i love it...great write
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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