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stripped away
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:20:27 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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when loves lasting grip, impedes upon your soul
you're forced to fight ,with all your might, to try to gain control
and in your struggle, you may find, a little shard of you
that's left behind, scarred for life, by miss "little you know who"
you lie awake at night, shake in fright, that the sun will soon be rising
when all along, you hear the song, at last your heart is dying
when images flash, of love long past, you pain will surely grow
there's no easy way, to live another day, with the love stripped from your soul
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Re: stripped away
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:25:40 AM AEST
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| very interesting read , I liked the poem . good. |
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Re: stripped away
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by the_story_of_the_year on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:56:18 AM AEST
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| It's truely a talent to talk about love and not make it sappy. Well done my friend. |
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Re: stripped away
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by TheRaven on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 02:58:04 AM AEST
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i agree with the_story_of_the_year...great job keeping the poem steady and not weepy...awesome job i can really feel the pain
the raven |
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Re: stripped away
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by emystar on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 04:23:02 AM AEST
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Very thought provoking, sad but true.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: stripped away
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 07:47:01 AM AEST
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strong emotional write. I would have preferred more formatting, but just an opinion.
Nice job.
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Re: stripped away
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by pixie on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 12:55:28 PM AEST
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awww this is sad.... but you have written it so well
pixie xx |
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Re: stripped away
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 10:08:45 PM AEST
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Different for you.... but not. I like this, holder - it's short but potent, I think. I like the format - it does a lot for the cadence of the piece. This one moves quickly it seems to me and then stops, bluntly, leaving the reader hanging on the last phrase. Works for me!
Always interested,
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Re: stripped away
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 10:08:50 PM AEST
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Different for you.... but not. I like this, holder - it's short but potent, I think. I like the format - it does a lot for the cadence of the piece. This one moves quickly it seems to me and then stops, bluntly, leaving the reader hanging on the last phrase. Works for me!
Always interested,
SNM |
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Re: stripped away
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 06:10:24 PM AEST
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wow very sad and beautiful I really liked this piece a lot...keep it up holder and Ill continue to read....
much love,
Dani |
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Re: stripped away
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 06:52:14 PM AEST
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Good write and so very true.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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