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Callow Metamorphosis
Contributed by
Psyche
on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:30:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Who might we be
Had we not tried to be
Who we were not?
A question whose answer
Lies lost forever
In ephemeral thought.
Through surgical personality splice
We performed such naive sacrifice
Our trades left a hole
In each unique soul
For we sold our own "am" for some "ought"
Copyright ©
Psyche
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2004-07-07 22:30:10]
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 11:07:35 PM AEST
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brilliant, warm welcome to ypdc:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by Luinil on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:42:40 PM AEST
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| wow your wording is really incredible.. great write* |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 09:27:00 PM AEST
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Your work is extremely insightful and envelopes, I believe, a delightful wry sense of humour.
Rita |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 10:19:24 PM AEST
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Alas! Nothing is more awful than an "ought to"... most especially when it's an "ought to BE"! As gently as possible, I suggest that the "am" is still lurking somewhere within - just waiting to be resurrected.
This is a wonderful piece! Thanks so much for sharing it and WELCOME to YPDC!!!!
Happily rejecting the "ought to's"
SNM |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 06:05:01 PM AEST
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Reflective and insightful poem.
I like the way you consider conformity a sacrifice, and not a necessary function of personality development.
Enjoyable read.
Welcome to YPDC. |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by venkat on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 06:30:29 AM AEST
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| its a brilliant work. venkat |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by hooray_its_jen on
Thursday, 29th July 2004 @ 11:16:36 AM AEST
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I enjoyed reading this....I liked the first verse a lot.
Who might we be
Had we not tried to be
Who we were not?
Very well written poem, I'm looking forward to reading more. Take care
Blessings
Love, Jenna |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 10:38:45 PM AEST
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| Amazing. |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 10:31:23 PM AEST
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| excellent poem by any standard, and the only problem i saw in it was the use of the same word rhymed with the same word in the first stanza. very good formatting by the way. |
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Re: Callow Metamorphosis
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by UnlovedChild on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 03:32:33 AM AEST
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| Very good write. I enjoyed it. |
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