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Elusive
Contributed by
merry
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Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 12:12:34 PM in AEST
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Lifepoems
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Happiness eludes my hands my heart
Wake to another day gone by
Drink of bitter disillusion
Salute the sun arching the sky
Cascade of stars too bright to capture
Sequins in the dark
Uneven ground to walk on
Adorned by silver streaking tears
Face eternity backwards
Longing to begin again
Copyright ©
merry
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2004-07-07 12:12:34]
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Re: Elusive
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by Sinful_Misery on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 12:56:05 PM AEST
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| Very well done. Good use of wording :) |
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Re: Elusive
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 01:12:10 PM AEST
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The sadness just oozes out of this. I feel it too, today. Another wonderful, deep write. I do so envy your talent.
Stitch |
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Re: Elusive
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 02:43:09 PM AEST
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| Your words ring clear and true to those who can grasp them. |
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Re: Elusive
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 04:06:24 PM AEST
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Your writing style and Stitch's reminds me of each others. You both pack a powerful punch into so few words at times. It proves that the mind can go to the wildest and deepest of places when sparked.
Oh and I think you to would do great in a collaberation. I truly do.
"Adorned by silver streaking tears"
That is imagery painted into a reader's mind.
Bravo Merry..
Kie
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Re: Elusive
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 04:18:04 PM AEST
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Well your words aren't elusive at all. They hit the nail right on the head. Very well done I might add!
Angel always...joni |
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Re: Elusive
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 04:47:57 PM AEST
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truely breathtakingly beautiful, gaille, if only... huggies n' love, nessa
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Re: Elusive
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 05:48:42 PM AEST
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Very yearning, very poetic, and very heartfelt. Excellent piece.
Andrew |
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