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Silence
Contributed by
gery_giggles
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Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 08:16:36 AM in AEST
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Silence crawls like shadows unknown,
feeling for a soul who lost all its will,
they crack open the shell awaiting
for the body to quiver in fear.
Hunting alone it tracks down the unknowing
hoping to tear them up and leave them to die.
Silence is in me trapping my soul,
it breaths down my neck,
smiling in triumph.
I run in circles hoping i can win,
but it brings only the cuts i love
in the darkness of the night.
Blood drips down soaking in the cloth,
and silence appears to lick it all up,
leaving me my salty tears.
SIlence hunts for me when i curl up in a ball,
it crawls like the shadows unknown,
feeling for my soul who cries all alone.
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Re: Silence
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by tbird on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 08:30:03 AM AEST
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| Silence personified as predator? Interesting. |
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Re: Silence
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 08:53:03 AM AEST
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*hugs Gery*
I hope things get better for you,
We're all here for you.
Great poem, very sad.
Things will get better
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Silence
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:18:05 AM AEST
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Your poem touched my heart with its emotion, rawness and cry.
Please know that this is the best place in the world to surround yourself with all of us. You are not alone, we are all here with you.
I wish I could give you a hug. ((Huggers))
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Re: Silence
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by Black13 on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:21:39 AM AEST
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Should have said unknown again in the second stanza. My only gripe.
I liked it. I like the idea behind it.
It was a very good vent.
Somewhat mysterious as you didn't fully elude to what was chasing but...
You left it open to the idea of pain.
Sorrow.
I can relate to this and I think it was a wonderful write.
Hope things get better and can't wait to see the next one. |
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Re: Silence
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:52:08 AM AEST
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awwww this is very sad and emotional Gery, *hugs you* as Phil said we are all here for you :) hope you feel better soon,
pixie xx |
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Re: Silence
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by WestCPunk on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 05:11:04 PM AEST
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Whooa that tripped me out lol awesome job keep writing!
Shelbi |
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Re: Silence
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 06:46:16 PM AEST
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| Silence.. ah silence.. very cool write |
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Re: Silence
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by WestCPunk on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 09:07:01 PM AEST
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Very well written and i hope you feel better. I always hate it when it's quiet there always has to be some kind of noise or i'll go crazy!
Much Love
Shelbi |
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Re: Silence
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by CrimsonTears on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 11:41:40 PM AEST
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I feel your pain...i'm a cutter myself i know how it feels....stay strong, try to work through it...you'll be all right in the end
Lots of Love
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