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unbreakable
Contributed by
drummerchic18
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Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 11:22:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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How can I see what’s deep inside
When I can’t get passed the tears I’ve cried
I shut the door
To keep my heart from getting torn
I want to run and hide
Won’t let anyone see what’s inside
To see my problems to know my life
Which is constantly filled with strife
I put a mask on each day
So people think that I’m okay.
I want no sympathy
All I want is to be free
For these chains to break
My life is at stake
I can’t run from this
I yearn for eternal bliss
My heart cries for peace
For all this pain and hurt to cease
My mind scatters beyond my control
Why I can’t tame it, that I wish I would know.
Only one thing I know I can do
To change all that I am going through
I’ll call upon his name
And he will rescue my soul from eternal pain.
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2004-07-06 23:22:13]
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Re: unbreakable
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by Lia on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 01:20:54 AM AEST
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| I have known a few ppl who feel this way...an ache from within that stays within is always hard to let go of |
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Re: unbreakable
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by fastpitchqt on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 06:09:10 PM AEST
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| very nice poem. Sad though. You might want to make your verses a lil longer though so it doesnt make the rhyme scheme sound weird. Other than that beautifully expressed! |
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Re: unbreakable
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:08:34 PM AEST
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to me it's great jus like it is.
Very good writing but most of our good stuff comes from pain.
Keep up the good work my new found friend and welcome to the site I see u havn't been here long.
luv, huggs,
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