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Something is different
Contributed by
WestCPunk
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Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 07:26:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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Something is different
Something has changed
I remember who I once was
And who I am now
There is nothing to say
My words will only hurt you
In every possible way
Not knowing why
I cringe when I talk
Why I seclude myself from everyone
Or what it is about me that ***** everyone off
Waiting for a fairytale
That will never come
I walk the streets at night
Watch cars go by
And try to think about the memorable times
I always seem to find myself
With my head in the sky
I may not be the best person
But at least I try
So as the stars seem to find me
Wherever I go
I'll always be the one to cry and moan
And you could probably hear my pain
Miles away
Nothings ok
No matter what they say
I'll never be ok
So why not just end everything today!
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WestCPunk
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Re: Something is different
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by arden on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 08:09:38 PM AEST
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well i sure can relate to this.
hopfully you do not feel this way anymore.
you have alot of talent and a very good way of exressing your feelings.
great write. 5 stars.
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Re: Something is different
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 03:33:39 AM AEST
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Okay again, great work on this one.
And once again, I agree with arden,
you do indeed have a most wonderful way of expressing your emotions.
I also like how you hinted at suicide right at the end, sudden, but powerful.
One thing you might like to try though (just a suggestion lol) is to try and work with a bi of rhythm.
It might make it better, or it might not, you'll never know if you don't try.
but other than that,
great work!!!
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Re: Something is different
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 05:45:29 PM AEST
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Shelbi, as hard as it is to accept the old adage 'it is always darkest before the light' is very true. So many give up right before the light would start to shine for them. Never give up. You have too much talent and heart to succumb to weakness. Just keep pushing forward and don't look back.
Rita |
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