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Mixed Thoughts Of Suicide
Contributed by
WestCPunk
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Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 06:39:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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It's a full moon tonight
And nothing seems quite right
It's 2 o'clock in the morning
Stolen cars drive by roaring
I find myself at a dead end
.....Forcing my mind to bend
Wishing that the stars will take me away
And hoping that I don't live to see the dawn of a new day
But then something grabs my attention
My attempt gets put aside
And I realise
That I don't want to be another statistic
Or another suicide
Then again
Nothing will ever be able to make me happy
At least not like I used to be
The swings continue to squeak
As I tear apart my mind and think
Thinking about what I should do
And what kind of life I'm gonna subject myself to
I lie in the grass
I lose myself
I finally come to the conclusion
The permanent solution!
Copyright ©
WestCPunk
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2004-07-06 18:39:06]
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Re: Mixed Thoughts Of Suicide
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by arden on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 06:59:24 PM AEST
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powerful.
i really like how its written. love the way you explain things in this. imagry was awesome. great poem. thanks for sharing, and welcome to ypdc :)
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Re: Mixed Thoughts Of Suicide
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 03:26:40 AM AEST
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Wow!
I think this poem is magnificent.
It carries within it a taste of undisturbed suspense that gallops uphill at full speed, only to plunge off the cliff at the last second and leave us wondering as to what "solution" you have chosen to incorporate throughout your life...
I can say a lot more on this poem but I suppose most of it will be indeed redundant.
I have a tendency towards redundancy...
*rolls eyes*
so anyway,
I really liked this poem and I agree with the above comment, it is indeed very powerful and brilliant imagery used as well..
Keep it up and welcome to this site!!!
_.:'~Katie~':._ |
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Re: Mixed Thoughts Of Suicide
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by venkat on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 03:34:11 AM AEST
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| O.K..I will repeat the comments of arden..this poem is really impressive..venkat |
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Re: Mixed Thoughts Of Suicide
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 05:48:58 PM AEST
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Yes, very definitely what Arden said. Strong, powerful, brilliant. I see we are dealing with a true artiste here. Good for you. Come to your own decisions and conclusions. Don't just follow the sheep to slaughter like all the weak ones. I destest suicide and the pain it leaves forever in the minds and hearts of those left behind that cared for that person. You can make it, and you will.
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