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Start What I've Ended
Contributed by
PieceOfABrokenSoul
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Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 02:29:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
ApologyPoetry
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“Start What I’ve Ended”
When the trees start to sway,
My heart gives way,
To the way we would always laugh.
But now things have gone truly wrong,
All the hurt is held in one song.
My life is in the ditch,
But I’ll give it one last pitch.
All I want to do is get back my friends,
Just remember me in all your ends.
Look through it all and see that I still feel lost without you.
The tears fall and flood the sorrow.
Life has changed before my eyes as I cry.
I cannot say I’m sorry enough.
I cannot say I don’t love you.
But I cannot live without you.
Start something I’ve ended.
Start a new life for me so I should see you’re not meant for me.
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PieceOfABrokenSoul
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2004-07-05 14:29:07]
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Re: Start What I've Ended
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by Hannah_Heaven on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 03:35:42 PM AEST
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aw im really sowwy
gr8 right though!
luv han x |
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Re: Start What I've Ended
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by Psyche on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 08:42:44 AM AEST
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You communicate your voice's lonliness very well, and caught my empathy, too. It left me with so many questions, "What happened?, Why can't you make the first effort? Did you try?" I think these are more directed to your explanation than to the poem though. Hah! My brain gets quite nosy sometimes! LOL
Leaving off that we know the circumstances, your sorrow and regret come through crystal clear. Great job, Thanks POABS!
P.S. Does the last line imply that the relationships were romantic/intimate? I am having trouble with connecting the desired response - the recipient's effort to "start over" with you - or reach out - to the ending line "So I should see you're not meant for me." Even striking the knowledge of your loss of close friendships, I am confused by this. But its good poetry that makes the reader ask questions of it. Thanks again for sharing!
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Re: Start What I've Ended
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by Pyrochick on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 09:36:48 PM AEST
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great poem. sad but good. u put into words the feeling i felt when i lost my best friends too. very good write.
~Kat Lat-rz~ |
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