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Inner turmoil
Contributed by
little_genna
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Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 08:46:34 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The world slips past unnoticed.
As if I could not see.
Yet I feel the constant turning of time.
I age just like everyone else yet I have no concept of time.
I wish to be free, yet you just can’t see.
I have so much inner turmoil.
My mind feels like the wreckage left after a whirlwind.
Nothing is clear or in order.
Too many thoughts trying to consume my frail body!
I sit alone in a torn dress crying in a corner of my mind.
Like an outcast from my very own thoughts.
How can this even be right?
My head is like a cocktail of feelings.
Should I disappear?
Yet how would that sound when you hear.
I just need help.
Yet is anyone willing enough to stand by me through everything.
And I do mean the very bad.
Like when I want to die.
There’s no point in crying I wont change for you.
Most think me a little strange when they begin to see me.
The workings of my mind.
It’s amazing what a happy exterior does for you.
Yet my interior is the mess that needs sorting.
To scream the red-hot feelings inside of me.
If only you could see into my mind you would be,
As crazy as me.
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Re: Inner turmoil
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by pixie on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 08:52:25 AM AEST
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great write, i think that we all feel like this at one time or another, I know that I do, so you are not alone with your inner turmoil *hugs you*
thanks for sharing
pixie xx |
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Re: Inner turmoil
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by Rhei76 on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 12:48:19 PM AEST
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Pixie is right. So since she said it I'll pray you to safe and you take care.
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Re: Inner turmoil
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by Lost_Shadow on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 05:02:17 PM AEST
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| though some go through it at least one time in their life most of us have to suffer it through out our life. Prayers can't help since I have had a few friends pray for me. There have been unfortunate incidents wher my friends have given their life to me to try and restore whatever feeling I may have left, but hey that's me. |
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Re: Inner turmoil
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by Destined_for_this on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 09:33:20 AM AEST
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| I want to comend you for having the courage to put this into word, and hence into our lives. It is good to see brave people. Keep writing. |
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Re: Inner turmoil
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by gmcse8 on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 07:52:04 PM AEST
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| Ok, here goes. Read it exactly 4 times. Kept looking for something underlying all of it. I found something that worked for me at least in the first four lines. First, to me at least, and I freely acknowledge that you maybe didnt mean any of this at all, but hell im the reader, can think what i want. To me the first four lines establish almost an out of body experience looking at you soul. all the rest seemed to be as if you were an announcer on tv saying what you see from your lofty perch outside yourself; and the puzzlement you experience when no one sees what is so plain and out in the open to you. My favorite line was "my head is like a cocktail of feelings". Thought at once of Long Island Iced Tea, they throw everything alcoholic but the kitchen sink in it. That line evoked that image for me and made me understand just a little, not a lot, but just a little or what you were feelings. Does it bug you when everyone that comments on your poems says I understand everything your going through, been there, done that? I guess I will be in the minority, I really don't understand what you were going through. my frame of reference is 40 years to early. A few little bits here and there, but nothing like comprehension. Even if I read one of yours I don' t paticularly like, and yes there are some......shock... They always make me think.........bob |
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