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Tool of the trade
Contributed by
Elazul
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Saturday, 3rd July 2004 @ 11:41:24 PM in AEST
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I'm not a tool
None shall use me
None shall abuse me
Not your weapon for revenege
Nor your ride to easy street
I will not worship you
Serve you
I know it sounds absurd to you
No longer your tool, your crutch
No longer the foundation of your empire
Suffer alone, I'm not your tool
I am ME
David 'Potter'
Copyright ©
Elazul
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2004-07-03 23:41:24]
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Re: Tool of the trade
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by exiled on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 12:24:44 AM AEST
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great work Harry potter, keep the words flowing and the sin growing.
Sam |
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Re: Tool of the trade
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by Stoney1 on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 12:26:04 AM AEST
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Well...your poem has one of the prime requisites of what I consider
to be elemental in a good poem. It's short and concise.
The line breaks are all over the place though, and you have one
typo in the 4th line. That's why the webmaster put a preview
button there; so you could give it one last check over and
eliminate errors. *g*
The word "tool" can have a number of connotations, and of course,
the bawdiest always comes to my mind when I'm reading poetry.
I guess I'm just bent that way.*g*
I'm not your creature would be more in context, I think.
All in all, it was a good read and worth the time to check it out.
Stoney |
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Re: Tool of the trade
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by Elazul on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 01:06:51 AM AEST
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| my brain never works right :P reason I can never remember to do simple stuff like that. |
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Re: Tool of the trade
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by Orlando on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 08:09:13 AM AEST
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| It honestly made me want more! I felt there should be more. I hope there will be more. Keep going with this one... if that feeling ever comes back to you. |
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Re: Tool of the trade
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by Unholy_Soldier on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 12:28:49 PM AEST
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Very well done, Altho I couldn't follow the meaning till I was told why you wrote it. I understand who your talking about, And many times I fell the same way. Just look at it this way. Family never turns its back on Family but friends are much more important. Imparshal reasoning is often the oil that thickens the blood. Great Write.
Unholy Soldier
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