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Look What I`ve Become
Contributed by
xxbreathlessx
on
Saturday, 3rd July 2004 @ 08:20:29 PM in AEST
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Cradling the light of hope
that i hold within
the light flickers in the
darkness that surrounds
evil lurks, suppressing sin
all u hear is the silent sound
that taunts your mind and
moves the ground
your body reduces to being numb
your falling head over feet
look wut you've become!
ur lost in this odd struken world
where the serious faces on t.v. tell
u news that makes u hurl
where everyone around u is a
perfect size 2
and ur left by urself
unwanted with truth
this hazy imperfection
has clouded ur mind
the candle still flickers
the lies still bind
and as u lay alone at night
u feel urself crying
bitter sweet tears gently flowing
ur heart breaks with this imperfection
you hold
and the candle- its out dark
in the cold
alone with this feeling
that will never let out
ur mind still spinning with
lingering doubt
your heart still breaking
your body still numb
and as you take a look in the mirror
you mutter softly,
look what i've become...
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2004-07-03 20:20:29]
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Re: Look What I`ve Become
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by purplestary on
Saturday, 3rd July 2004 @ 08:37:23 PM AEST
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| awsome write!! that poem kicks a$$! you expressed yourself so well in this. |
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Re: Look What I`ve Become
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by waos on
Saturday, 3rd July 2004 @ 08:39:08 PM AEST
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i really liked that. it was really good. the only way to make it better would be to add more punctuation to make it easier to read.
the words are so true and i love them. such a good job. |
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Re: Look What I`ve Become
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by tifrob on
Saturday, 3rd July 2004 @ 09:38:24 PM AEST
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I loved it. Don't change a thing. It's great!
J~ |
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Re: Look What I`ve Become
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by pixie on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 06:34:10 AM AEST
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great poem, perfectly written
pixie xx |
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Re: Look What I`ve Become
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by mountainhigh on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 03:41:11 PM AEST
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Look not to a mirror, but into a mind, somewhere lost in time, and wander back, and look again........and see where it all began.
Great poem |
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