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Gnash Your Teeth
Contributed by
outdoorsman
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Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 12:30:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Gnash your teeth in your evil grin
stab me in the back with your words
break my soul, frail and fragile
it's on the brink of extinction
numb to your voice and living in fear
so show that bad side and wash me away
I'll never be the one and you made it this way
condemned to never forget the nights we shared-
but the nights alone are all I can see
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outdoorsman
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2004-07-02 00:30:42] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Gnash Your Teeth
(User Rating: 1 ) by bj111 on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 04:35:45 AM AEST (User
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Found this to be full of interesting impressions and possibilities. Wondered if you had thought of using fewer words...particularly in the first 4 lines...and make it sound less cliche.
If you'd like to see what I mean, I could work this up a little and show you. Interested? ...bob |
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