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Rìanna
Contributed by
fionndruinne
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Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 04:59:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
mythology
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Angamachel am
Celdeth tama
Cassachel na mael
Vànad trom nan dilen
Dànnad creitheth cuill
Lànad finda.
Faithachel am e
Talvach sleinna el
Cassachel nicenness
Dànnad tai nan connan
Tanachath finda
Crissech taenun tìrel.
Creithed faitha
Fìach rìanna truich
Ànan sèinna cuill
Faimach trom nan connan
Sèinness finfàra
A cenndech ràn na nèill.
As I was walking
In peaceful forest
I saw the sunlight
Shining through the leaves
Dancing on slender aspen stems
Glimmering whitely.
As I watched it
I fell to dreaming
I saw a maiden
Dancing beside the trees
In a mantle of white
Encircled by starfire.
My gaze faltered
The nymph was gone
But a slender music
Echoed through the trees
An Elvish melody
That only the wind recognized.
Copyright ©
fionndruinne
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Re: Rìanna
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by arden on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 05:18:04 PM AEST
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wow andrew im like amazed by this.
very beautiful and enchanting.
i really am in awe of this, so much beauty held within this.
loved it.
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Re: Rìanna
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by liquidsunshine on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 05:45:31 PM AEST
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| Holy smokes, Andrew! You've blown me away on this one. |
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Re: Rìanna
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by Joker17 on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 07:07:07 PM AEST
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arden said it best, "Enchanting." It was very beautiful, like a filtered reality. I'm really enjoying your poetry very much. It's refreshing, and I love the perspective you're coming from. Excellent.
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Re: Rìanna
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 07:23:31 PM AEST
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I don't normally read this sort of poetry, but I liked this one, it had beautiful qaulity to it.
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Re: Rìanna
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 09:08:45 PM AEST
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Oh, this was wonderful Andrew.
With such enchanting beauty, this write really captivates. |
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Re: Rìanna
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by faith_my_eyes on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 12:30:26 AM AEST
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nice, mystical ditty
and I love the word for "Nymph" in your language... it is beautiful (Belle! haha!)
Emily |
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Re: Rìanna
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 03:01:11 PM AEST
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No need to repeat what you've written in your past life, Andrew. Tinuviel is better than Rìanna, anyway.
But very good. I'm getting used to being amazed by your improvement as a writer.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Rìanna
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 3rd July 2004 @ 09:46:14 AM AEST
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Oh, Andrew - I can only echo the words in the comments above. Enchanting... beautifully done! You are a wonderful gift to romantic souls... leaving us sighing and swooning for having read your work! Could it be any better than that?
Finding peace in knowing there are poets like you in the world,
SNM |
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Re: Rìanna
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 06:07:36 AM AEST
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Andrew, The finished piece is truly beautiful and the title is pefrect for it. This is amazing my friend.
*hugs you lots*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Rìanna
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 01:02:02 AM AEST
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~:*wow*:~ enchantingly beautiful:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Rìanna
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 06:20:25 AM AEST
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Wonderful work...
You seem to be able to understand what the leaves whisper and the wind sighs...
Magnificent.
Greetz,
Hur |
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Re: Rìanna
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by Stitch on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 06:45:08 PM AEST
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I have only two criticisms:
1. The repeat of the word "slender"
2. I'd leave out "that" at the beginning of the last write.
Otherwise you have a perfectly beguiling write here. Very, lovely and enjoyable.
Stitch |
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Re: Rìanna
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 10:10:43 PM AEST
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Bravo Andrew.......this is so enchanting.....as if I'm actually there with you also. Images that last in a person's head long after the read.
You have such wonderful talent.
Very enjoyable read!
thank you
lovingcritters
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Re: Rìanna
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by Archie on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 03:40:12 AM AEST
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| This poem is stunningly written. I too have a love for nature. |
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Re: Rìanna
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by Heartfilledblood on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 09:46:58 PM AEST
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| What a beautiful poem my friend. I really enjoyed this poem. Great write. |
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Re: Rìanna
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by Black13 on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 07:40:08 PM AEST
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This was indeed sublime.
(looks bashful)
I did skip your language...
It was darn good though mate.
Excelletn write and incredible flow.
What a thing that would be. |
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Re: Rìanna
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 02:57:06 PM AEST
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I love how you wrote it in both languages...espcecially how you wrote your language first; it set the mood for the peaceful poem. I loved the personification in the first stanza, and Ithink starfire is a cool word. You definitely have a way with grasping the few beautiful words we do have in the English language and forming them into a graceful piece. (Ahhh...think if we were French!?!?) Well done, very mystical.
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Re: Rìanna
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 09:45:03 PM AEST
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| Very beautiful write. Something to ponder on my next visit to the forest. Much peace. I love your poetry, you are a master. |
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Re: Rìanna
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by mom11159 on
Monday, 15th August 2005 @ 08:33:56 PM AEST
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So beautiful and so very well written. Your imagery is perfect setting a clear and wonderful pic as I read your captivating words leaving me in a state of awe so breathtaking I loved it
Excellent
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