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end her life
Contributed by
deadbloodyrose
on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 12:04:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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typing at the computer sharing my life with others
hearing sobs and cries escape from under the covers
i glance back and see tears flowing out of your eyes
her painful words are bringing you to your demise
hatred for her grows like a vine and strangles my heart
it kills me inside to see you like this falling apart
i try and comfort but my words fail at easing your pain
my deadly rage towards her i can no longer restrain
vivid plans of her departure consume all my thoughts
almost hear her high pitched scream after my shots
inside my head i see her drowning in her own blood
crimson red swallows up her house in its deathly flood
thoughts dont torture so i head over to her house
i find her layin on the ground with her undone blouse
the reason she ended your relationship was a lie
she never sees me as she lets out a pleasurefull sigh
all four eyes are closed as i swiftly sneak up behind
knives in my hands and her painful death on my mind
pulling her partner off i toss her onto the ground
she lays there astonished barely making a sound
i have nothing against her she simply got in my way
knife piercing her skull is the price she will now pay
turning back to my sisters ex i see shes disappeared
i follow the trail of her blood thats been smeared
hiding in the corner hands covering her hideous face she prays to the lord and asks him for his good grace nothing can stop me now as i have her how i want her she hurt so many in her life now she meets her killer with my rope i tie her hands as she kicks and screams blood and sweat run off her beaten face in streams
i retrieve my knife as she lies on the ground in a pile
forcing the blade into her body i begin to smile
blood sprays up into my eyes and blurs my vision
i wipe my face and down falls the bright red crimson
her screams flow out creating a melodic rhytmic tune
beauty of her pain reminds me of a rose in full bloom
my knife happily carves away at her body full of fat
she pleads with me to stop as onto her face i spat
i hold my knife above my head and watch her lay there
her body barely alive and her face marked with terror
into her chest i deeply thrust my steel chrome knife
she murdered my sisters heart now i shall end her life
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2004-06-29 00:04:09]
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Re: end her life
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by xXxFaygoFetishxXx on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 12:17:36 AM AEST
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Wow Ami Jo.
I really like this poem.
its really descriptive and shows how much you care for your sister.
Cori deserves better than that.
oh by the way...
RAWR =D
::Elizabeth::
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Re: end her life
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 12:35:42 AM AEST
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| woah. that is way passionate and deep. you totally expressed the anger and deep hatred that I think we've all felt. sara's lucky to have a sibling who loves her as much as you do! |
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Re: end her life
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 02:23:45 AM AEST
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Dam this is hardcore, so much pain and hatred, I almost drowned in the agony of what you went through, this poem is vivid, it was like being there, and graphic, it was like a plot unfolding before my eyes.
awesome, write,
Take care Kindredblood dragon |
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Re: end her life
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by JT on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 08:27:11 AM AEST
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what a solid write. so much raw anger screaming out.
-jt- |
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Re: end her life
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 12:05:25 PM AEST
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very powerful and dark...
great write
pixie xx |
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Re: end her life
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by cryingonmyporch on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 04:08:21 PM AEST
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Beautifully written I applaud you!
~Amy |
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Re: end her life
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by Vermillion on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 02:23:46 PM AEST
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now thats what i call dark poetry. the blood,the knives,the terror
i dont know where you get your murderous imaginations.but i like it.
outstanding write keep up the excellent work.
~vermillion~ |
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Re: end her life
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by adamsbabygurlie on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 04:25:38 PM AEST
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| hey Ami i like ur poems keep up the great work |
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Re: end her life
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by shorty_52 on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 08:19:24 PM AEST
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wow this is good. creepy, and i like the murderus mood when i read it. keep up the good work it was good.
~allyson~ |
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