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Killing The Pain
Contributed by
Seans_Girl
on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 10:37:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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She sits surrounded by people,
But she is alone in this place
Trying to choke back the tears,
Just longing for his embrace
Remembering all they had,
The tears tumble down like rain
She has another drink,
Trying to drown her pain
She thinks of all the good times,
The quiet walks through the park
But now that he has left her,
Her world seems totally dark
He wanted to leave her,
It was not her choice at all
What would happen in those bad times
When he wouldn't be able to break her fall
She moves to the room's center,
Her judgement blocked by gloom
She points a gun to her head,
A bang silences the room
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Seans_Girl
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2004-06-28 22:37:52]
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Re: Killing The Pain
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by freespirit on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 10:52:51 PM AEST
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hi
no man is worth taking ones life over
his loss say good bye and move on
take care |
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Re: Killing The Pain
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 10:55:54 PM AEST
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broken heart, sorrow clouded by drink, isolation swallowed by lead, this would have made an awesome dark poem, but everyone chooses which catagory suits them. I know of the pain of betrayal, to be dropped as if from a height, and ending up with a shattered future, so I'm hoping you will be able to put this behind you and move on, I espeicially hope you find the one that is right for you in everyway.
Please look after yourself and take care
Kindredblood dragon |
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Re: Killing The Pain
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 06:35:52 AM AEST
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every stanza was fanatastic to read!
but i like the last one best.
"she move to te room's center,
her judgement blocked by gloom
she points the gun to her head,
a bang silence in the room"
... i just tink that's so powerful!
i can't even begin... |
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Re: Killing The Pain
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 12:13:06 PM AEST
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wonderfully written from beginning to end
pixie xx |
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Re: Killing The Pain
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by tifrob on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 02:16:41 AM AEST
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This is very well written. You grab the read and held on to the end. Good Poem.
~Me~ |
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Re: Killing The Pain
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th June 2006 @ 01:46:20 AM AEST
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Glad i read this u don't know it but it helped
thank you. very lovely write, and sad but easilie relateable. well done.
Ben |
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