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gone
Contributed by
twitch
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Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 09:19:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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last time i've seen her she was gone like when the moon disapears and you can see the dawn.
when i use to see her i did have anything to say well she is gone and that is the price to pay.
i loved her so much she was the love of my life if she was still here i would love her as a wife.
now i am thinking about her as i am moowing the lawn but what could i say the love of my life is gone.
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2004-06-28 21:19:26]
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Re: gone
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by brew on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 09:23:40 PM AEST
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| Not bad for the first poem.seems you wrote it to your true love, that is what makes it sweet. |
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Re: gone
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by bebe20071 on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 09:56:12 PM AEST
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not bad lil bro keep up the good wrok :)
big sis |
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Re: gone
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 11:20:47 PM AEST
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I really like it. Keep on writing. You will get better with every poem. Structure and spelling are important, but the base of this poem is strong and vibrant.
Smiles,
Rita |
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