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She Said, I Said
Contributed by
Steven_Fenton1982
on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 04:02:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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She said.....
I'm bored of being on this road,
I'm tired of these red lights.
I'm sick of this talk about love,
and I'm losing patience with you.
She said.....
I wish you were a rich man,
our bills would pay themselves.
I wish you could find the words,
our dreams would be clearer.
Her words are like broken pieces,
from a scattered jigsaw of her face.
Her eyes are like melting colours,
from a faded photo on my wall.
I said.....
Promises are made when the brain eclipses the heart,
and lies are like knives cutting through our silence.
Tears are the dreams our hearts can no longer hold,
and the smiles cover the sadness for only so long.
Copyright ©
Steven_Fenton1982
... [
2004-06-28 16:02:46] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: She Said, I Said
(User Rating: 1 ) by indiradesha on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 05:28:19 PM AEST (User
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"Tears are the dreams our hearts can no longer hold"...thats really incredible. That last stanza is very solid, and i think effectively resolves the piece. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: She Said, I Said
(User Rating: 1 ) by angelav on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 06:31:16 PM AEST (User
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Really great poem. Flows well, and gives a clear message. Nice work. |
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Re: She Said, I Said
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 10:36:01 PM AEST (User
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amazing write. what you said is very insightful and true. more than excellent in my opinion =]
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