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Vicious circle
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 10:08:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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How do you explain something that seems so simple,
Yet is understood to be so hard?
And push it away while grasping it with both hands
As if to lose it would be to lose part of yourself,
While holding on to the realization that what you truly want is right in front of you,
But is still so far away, too far away to cling onto,
And all you really want to do is hold on as if life depended on it...
But are too afraid to even reach for it in case it turns and runs away,
To leave you crumbling to the ground,
While life looks on and laughs,
And you have nothing...
Then your hope slowly dissolves...each rejection a raging blow,
Until you start to realize you will never get What you have so desperatly wished for for so long,
And the grip with which you hold onto your hope starts to fail,
And the tears start to fall,
As you notice that everyone has gone and you are holding onto nothing but stone...
The laughter is not the sound of life looking on,
It is your fear telling you how you should never have bothered,
And you never do again, because no one could love someone like you.
Until you find yourself once again.
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lostinmyself
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Re: Vicious circle
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 10:32:56 PM AEST
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Philly, you will love and be loved and until that time we are here for you. Your heart and soul are too beautiful not to catch some mans attention who will love you madly and forever. Never fear love, only be careful about the lovers.
Huge hugs,
Rita |
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Re: Vicious circle
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 10:35:50 PM AEST
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Yes I know, I've been having writers block and its awful!!!!!
But this my friend is not at all rubbish, in fact its far from it. There is so much wisdom and honesty in this write. Lovely.
Great write. |
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Re: Vicious circle
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 10:51:19 PM AEST
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Well phil, I must agree with all of the above comments. This is not rubbish, it's called poetic muse! Very well done I might add.
Rubbish? Oscar? the grouch? lol ;-) word associating....stop me now! lol
Angel always...godspeed my friend...joni |
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Re: Vicious circle
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 03:28:00 PM AEST
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hmmm... i think we all feel like this sometimes, i love how you wrote this, very deep, your reader cant help but think of their own life! *mutters now* ...truely an excellent poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Vicious circle
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 09:14:35 PM AEST
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| great write. =] |
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Re: Vicious circle
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by DerPinguin44 on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 10:04:29 PM AEST
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I'm not too big on free verse, but this made me turn around and say,
"Whoa! Lost my skivies!"
It's great, thank you for, well, helping me like free verse more. It's a great poem. |
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Re: Vicious circle
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by venkat on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 12:47:04 AM AEST
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No..this is not rubbish.. thought ful musings
Nicely expressed..any way I have no idea about this writers block..If you feel it is not an interesting block..you can decide..
venkat
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Re: Vicious circle
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by arden on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 10:10:04 AM AEST
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iv had these thoughts before.
a very powerful and deep poem. written very well. i liked this one alot.
i didnt think it was rubbish, i thought it was amazing.
5 stars phil.
Arden |
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