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Trapped
Contributed by
meowmix_2011
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Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 06:32:31 PM in AEST
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Trapped inside myself. I'm alone.
Trapped inside myself. For days.
Trapped inside myself. I'm safe.
Trapped inside myself. For hours.
Trapped inside myself. Its quiet.
Trapped inside myself. Forever.
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Re: Trapped
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 06:53:41 PM AEST
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hi meowmix {cute name!} interesting layout, i feel like that sometimes too, warm welcome to ypdc:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Trapped
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 08:11:51 PM AEST
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I think 'trapped inside myself' made it tedious to read as it was repeated every time. Maybe it would have been more pleasing to the ear and eye as:
Trapped inside myself
I'm alone
For days
I'm safe
For hours
Its quiet
Forever
I think it would be much more unique and palatable. JMHO
Smiles,
Rita
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Re: Trapped
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 11:21:00 PM AEST
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| i agree with rita. repetition gets tedious sometimes, even in songs. |
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Re: Trapped
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by behind_green_eyes on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 03:18:07 AM AEST
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I think I agree.. the repetition is a bit much, but still loved it. Short, to the point. :) Great job!
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