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A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:13:30 PM in AEST
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dear Mom,
I remember
back before life was gray
and before the world lost its polish
when I used to call you "Mommy"
and I remember
when you would ask how school was
and I'd say something other than "fine"
and I remember
when you would knock on the door to my room
and I wouldn't just try to get you to leave
as soon as possible
so I could get back to what I was doing
and I remember
when I used to confide in you
tell you my secrets, my little-kid crushes
and make you promise not to tell
it's been a long, long time
since I've told you a secret
and I wonder what you'd think
if I told you that I just made myself break up
with someone you've never heard of
who I "met" on a website you don't know about
and who I've never met in person
and likely never will,
crying for someone I never wanted to hurt,
and seeing him take the news
better than I could give it.
and, though I can't imagine myself telling you
'cause I just don't tell you things anymore,
I have one tiny request--
tonight, when I go to bed,
and tell you, "night, Mommy"
instead of my usual, "night, Mom",
. . . don't tease me about it, okay?
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-06-24 13:13:30]
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by pixie on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:16:31 PM AEST
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wow this is really powerful, i have to say i am a big fan of your work Shadowdaughter.
pixie xx |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:19:45 PM AEST
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Nora....
Its ok, im here for you always.
*hugs and doesnt let go*
i can feel the sadness in this Nora, not just read it..i can feel it.
i wish there were something i could do or say to make it less.
Stay strong hun.
I know it hurts.
*hugs* phil xxx |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:21:34 PM AEST
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Nora,
This is one of my favorites. It's got that little girl quality. That, "if only mom could come kiss my booboo", everything is better type of stuff. I love it. You didnt have to tell us this was an emotional write to know that you're hurting. You describe it so well. And as you already know, but I want to confirm, I am always here if you need me. Night or day. Anytime. Feel better nora. But never stop writing these poems. They are amazing. As are you. And people are lucky to get to share these moments with you. Thank you for being a great friend Nora. Always there for me. :)
Alright going to go before I get too mushy,
Oh too late.
Lindsey |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:26:30 PM AEST
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This is sad, but beautifully written. A page from your heart. Nora, I think somewhere in all of us we all still need our Mommy's at times. I know I do.
Love n hugs,
Rita |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Black13 on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:39:06 PM AEST
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I don't even know what to say Nora.
Painful.. Very painful...
It brings back memmories of my life... In ways... The loss of connections in a certain aspect...
I barely know what to say here Nora... I wish I did. |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by arden on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:53:29 PM AEST
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wow nora... this was..powerful? truely amazing. so much deep emotion expressed. i hope things get better soon for you, and you know if you need to vent or anything that ill listen.
nicely done chicky.
Becky
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by carmen_queasy on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:57:18 PM AEST
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| That was beautiful. |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 04:40:44 PM AEST
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awww!! i have tears in my eyes, this is so damn sweet nora!! ((((nora)))) love, nessa
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 06:35:16 PM AEST
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Nora, this is so powerful, so deep...gorgeous, yet sad, enchanting, yet poignant. Of all poets i've read in my life, famous or otherwise, you're work hits me the hardest; you are the only writer who can really bring a tear to my eye.
This is touching, and every word falls into place perfectly. Thank you for sharing this amazing piece.
With love, chocolate, aarkvarks (chocolate aarkvarks?!?!? lol), rainbows and all things good,
-Dan |
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by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 10:49:44 PM AEST
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No matter how old you get Your never too old to tell them you love them! I wish mine was still here to tell.Always let her know!
Great write,it touched me! Christina |
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 11:20:04 PM AEST
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Wow, this was amazing, I truly enjoy reading your writes.
I loved the child like innocence in the poem.
A write that has immense strength, good job. :)) |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 06:13:58 PM AEST
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changes cut deeply and i think you captured that
PFR |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 02:34:15 AM AEST
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There is not a word that I could put here that would fully explain what this poem did to me. By far... this is the hardest comment I've written to date. I am... without words, Nora (and YOU KNOW that's not like me!). Oh gosh... I just want to gush all over this one. It really, really touched me. And Oh! can I relate to this!
Exceptional, beautiful, powerful, amazing, eloquent, incredible, inciteful, unbelievable.... not even all those words together are enough.
Not just Wow - but Pow, you know? And yeh... ouch. Pass the tissues this way, Nora - you got me.
Stand up and take a bow!
I am simply, utterly, blown away-
SNM |
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 04:05:06 AM AEST
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It's not often I comment twice, but this one deserves it. Every time I read this, I want to cry and give my mom a hug. This is way beyond anything as primitive as beautiful.
-Dan |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by emystar on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 04:21:24 AM AEST
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I agree with everyone else it's a bit sad but written well.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by gery_giggles on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 06:59:00 AM AEST
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uh oh...you got me in tears!....this is so sad!....but i liked it so much i had to read it again.
luv always |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 06:31:18 PM AEST
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| This is a great poem. My mom passed away this year ... |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 03:15:07 AM AEST
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What? Have I really failed to comment on this one?
*kicks self*
I loved this the first time, and I love it now. You're right, it was a glimpse deeper into your heart than we usually get, and it touches my own heart.
Slàn my friend.
Andrew |
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by wray on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 02:23:17 AM AEST
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Ok I'm with everyone else, this is tear-rendering, simply because we all feel this in some part of ourselves I think, and I understand how this could be so emotional that it's almost scary, as you say. One question I had was about
and before the world lost its polish
when I used to call you "Mommy"
coz I thought it was the world polishing YOU that made you go from Mommy to Mom? Then again I suppose you're talking about a different kind of polish, like the magic of a lifetime where honest love and faith and trueheartedness still existed.. Anyways good, life-changing stuff, I'm gonna go help my mum cook dinner now :) |
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 12:33:57 AM AEST
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I had to come back here, Nora. And - like Dan - I rarely comment more than once (I can think of only one other occasion that I did so). I've read this a number of times now... and wanted to mention that it loses nothing with the familiarity that comes from multiple reads. It may well increase in its ability to move the reader.
I remain astounded by this piece and I'm rather sure I will always, always feel that way. There are so very many reasons that I find this beautiful. I've tried twice now - but - I'm now resolved that I will never be able to tell you how much this has moved me.
I do so wish I could though-
SNM |
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by Stitch on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 12:59:36 PM AEST
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As a mom, this is wrenching. My daughter is 12. She still shares with me. I don't ever want that to change. I hate it when she has a friend around and they whisper to each other. I don't embarass her by making her tell, but I hate it. I wan't to be her "mama" forever. I know she has to grow up, but I never want to lose the connection to the fact that she's my little girl.
Stitch |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Cynthia on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 09:17:30 PM AEST
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I'm lost for words Nora.
I don't know exactly what to say.
This is such a tear jerker.
The way I feel right now, it won't take much.
Such a sad piece.
*S* Cynthia |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 02:07:32 PM AEST
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You've touched a point that most parents experience with sadness. Its not often to be something recognized much less commented on by the daughter, or son.
My highest compliments to you on not only a touching and heart wrenching write, but on the ability to even think to put in words. |
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Re: A Letter to Mommy, Not Mom
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by clotti on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 01:20:59 PM AEST
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| wow! this so touched me i really like it. i think this happens to everyone, they grow apart from their family and closer to their friends (im there right now) but soon enough we will relise what our families mean to us and they will always be there and we will go back soon enough |
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