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A Whisper Drowned In Tears
Contributed by
baronhawk
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Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:26:45 AM in AEST
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I hear it now so clear,
a whisper drowned in tears,
a sombre lullaby,
most bitter of goodbyes.
Standing on these shores,
regretting past befores,
as time sauntered by,
and I'm to ponder why.
My gaze construed my sight,
ablaze into the night,
my dreams of new horizons,
it seems askew forlorn.
As hope has gone away,
I spoke unsung dismay,
that glimmer in the dark,
have simmered and unspark.
The oasis of the heart,
once bliss without a blight,
now sundered and condemned,
dust-choked and harsh-dried land.
Copyright ©
baronhawk
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2004-06-24 01:26:45]
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:35:55 AM AEST
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beautifully haunting and sad, a very well done poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by venkat on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:52:15 AM AEST
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I totally agree with the comment of Ladyfawn..
musical to the ear..yet it is a sad song..beautiful to the eye yet, the oasis turned desolate..Beautifully written..venkat |
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by pixie on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 06:01:10 AM AEST
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awww beautiful and emotional all rolled into one, a very great write indeed
pixie xx |
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by sweetangeluk on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 03:22:49 PM AEST
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Fantastic loved the words in this poem
Brill
Love SweetAngelukxxx |
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 04:20:52 PM AEST
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| lovely- beautifully written |
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 12:57:40 AM AEST
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Vivid and beautiful language! Very haunting. Thanks for another excellent, meaningful piece. Bravo!
*raises mead-horn*
Andrew |
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 04:43:03 PM AEST
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The title caught my eye and your poem pulled at the invisible string of emotion inside of me.
A whisper doesn't drown in tears Baronhawk. It makes a sound that is universal and it is heard.
Don't ever give up hope, just keep on writing.
You will love again (this I truly believe) if you will put aside logic and intellect and feel with the huge heart that you write with.
I am playing catch up with your writings.
You keep improving, even when I think you can't possibly write something on a higher level of poetic professionalism.
Well done as usual.
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Re: A Whisper Drowned In Tears
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 03:42:53 PM AEST
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*sigh*
This is a wonderfully sad piece - and I mean that in a good way. I honestly don't know if it was your sadness or mine that seemed to overtake me as I read this... it was, I guess, exceptionally relatable for me. A "whisper drowned in tears"... gosh... that's so awful in reality and so beautiful in its inclusion here. Very moving, Baronhawk... and very nicely done!
Listening to the whispers,
SNM |
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