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A sip of pain at the right moment
Contributed by
Living_In_My_Dream
on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 10:22:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Pain soars through my veins,
I befriend the darkness,
I embrace my death,
I see you there, I need you now,
your glitter is my freedom,
your sweet pain I'll sip tonight,
not too much, not just yet,
they don't understand...I love you.
Caress me beautiful pain,
fall into my arms,
flow through my veins,
set me free my love,
don't let me be.
I am numb to you now,
so touch me more, let me soar,
I want to be no more.
We tried this once my love,
and we failed, but help me now,
release me from my tomb,
I am trapped in flesh and bone,
a disease that burns and breathes,
kill me now, it festers...it seethes,
I love you pain, and your gentle embrace,
I am feeble and frail, so caress me again,
and we'll follow the crimson river to death,
not too soon, not just yet.
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Re: A sip of pain at the right moment
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 10:47:38 PM AEST
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A poem written TO and of pain --- very creative and absolutely heartwrenching. I love the ending... "follow the crimson river to death"... omigod... that's strong!
This is very well done. Thanks for sharing it!
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Re: A sip of pain at the right moment
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by Alyshia on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 11:15:15 PM AEST
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| I really like how your poem flows together and the rhyming pattern...very vivid at the end. I really like the last 4 lines. |
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Re: A sip of pain at the right moment
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by pixie on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 06:39:25 AM AEST
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wow this is one of the best suicide poems i have ever read on here ........
very emotional and heart breaking,
pixie xx |
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Re: A sip of pain at the right moment
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 05:30:36 AM AEST
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LOVED it! And the title was just so clever. Hehe. Thanks for sharing. Very interesting read.
Lindsey |
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