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portrait
Contributed by
Luinil
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Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:29:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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Sharpen your brush, paint me an image
Smother my eyes with darkened delight
Smear my cheeks with coy craving
Spread your hue for me to breathe
Stroke my lips to drink your core
Swathe my soul, ever part of your canvas
Smother my being, melt into me
Copyright ©
Luinil
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2004-06-23 17:29:11]
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Re: portrait
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:36:11 PM AEST
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wow, wow, wow, very very beautiful...hehe I had to repeat myself a few times...
I liked this one a lot thanks you so much for sharing...
keep it up keep it coming
much love,
Dani |
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Re: portrait
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by evilfairy on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 08:20:49 PM AEST
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| i like this very much!!! i wish there was more of it to read! |
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Re: portrait
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 09:07:11 PM AEST
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| very nice indeed. |
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Re: portrait
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by pixie on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 07:03:28 AM AEST
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truly great write,
pixie xx |
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Re: portrait
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 11:47:18 AM AEST
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sensuous and beautiful, what a picture:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:-
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Re: portrait
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by Psyche on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 08:34:29 AM AEST
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| Very sexy, and somewhat coy - especially at the beginning. It felt to me like the voice was desired another to be obsessive/passionate about him/her. It is not until the end that I felt the voice allow the relationship to be two way, which is the coy part.. I felt like you were flaunting yourself to another at first. "Desire me, Desire me!"... That made the last line even better - like you were just playing hard to get, in the end you give us resolution rather than only longing! So sexy!! Thank you for sharing this! |
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