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Salted Needle Points
Contributed by
pyrofungus
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Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 04:44:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Salted lungs
Pictures in place
A clock dings
It's nobody's mistake
Weave between the curtains
Watch your place
Hold the needle steady and secure
Twitch a bit
Watch the wind blow
Papers being carried away
All that work
Hard work indeaed
A needle breaks
Hear it crack!
It's too late!
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2004-06-23 16:44:47]
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by ShadowDaughter on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 04:51:26 PM AEST
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Whoa . . . first 6 lines, especially, were great. Nicely done.
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by holderofthestone on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 04:53:26 PM AEST
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| hmmm interesting write. creative wording. I'll have to read more of your work, this one is intriguing. A+++ |
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by yellow_sundragon on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:17:00 PM AEST
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yes, interesting.... good write, well done!
*J* |
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by Luinil on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:32:20 PM AEST
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| yes definitely very creative... great work* |
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by slackoffsamiam on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 08:03:30 PM AEST
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very artsy, refreshing to see something different
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by CeruleanAfterglo on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 08:43:57 PM AEST
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| Very powerful and interesting, nice work :) |
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by Mortis-Dark on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 01:37:16 AM AEST
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Truly divine. It seems we are both keepers of the darkness. Excellent write.
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Re: Salted Needle Points
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by frejya on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 05:55:24 AM AEST
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wut does tht mean?
reply wid full details plz
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