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Lavendar Ashes
Contributed by
imaginary
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Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:23:04 PM in AEST
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I stand in front of a brick wall
No matter what i say it wont break
It shouts words dictated so clearly
Leaving cement spit all over my face
I'm starting to loose my mind
As i plea for this wall to shatter
I scream and i through punches
My bloody nuckles just make it fatter
I cross my arms and i start to shed tears
This battle has clearly been won
But, ho, not so fast, for look what i have
A book of matches will do the job
What is left of a brick barrior
Who'd have guessed it would catch fire
Lavender ashes show in the sunlight
Dissapearing with the wind,
I've accomplished my last desire.
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imaginary
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Re: Lavendar Ashes
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:35:52 PM AEST
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| I love this metaphor. it's so sadly true. I thought I had a wall up, but, any guy I date definitely out does me and it's inifinitely frustrating. you definitely captured that frustration well. thanks for sharing!! |
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Re: Lavendar Ashes
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 09:33:55 PM AEST
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| I liked this one.. Nice title , great use of words |
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Re: Lavendar Ashes
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 11:47:36 PM AEST
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| great write. |
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Re: Lavendar Ashes
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 10:07:22 PM AEST
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wonderful title, it drew me right in, this poem had several meanings to me, great write:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Lavendar Ashes
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 06:35:14 PM AEST
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Very vivid, emotional writing. Well done! I like the use of metaphor.
Andrew |
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