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The Misunderstood Sinner
Contributed by
SuperAsh16
on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:13:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
Haiku
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the wind rushes past
as chaos unfurls
i am but a pawn
Copyright ©
SuperAsh16
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2004-06-22 23:13:10]
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Re: The Misunderstood Sinner
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:19:21 PM AEST
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| a haiku has a 5/7/5 syllable set up. but i like your idea. you could say something such as in the second verse as the chaos then unfurls. |
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Re: The Misunderstood Sinner
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:57:33 PM AEST
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Don't know anything 'bout 5/7 or what ever but this iss good as is.
makes a person think.
Good work.
huggs, luv,
eemy |
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Re: The Misunderstood Sinner
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 07:50:19 AM AEST
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wow, this was great...
pixie xx |
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