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~Flight~
Contributed by
RonMiller
on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 06:59:07 PM in AEST
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~Flight~
Got out of bed this morning.
At least I think I did.
Mind was fuzzy, thoughts weren't sorting,
couldn't clear my head.
Somehow, I made it to work,
walked up to her and said "Hi".
She looked so sad and deeply hurt,
so I had to stop and ask why.
She seemed to look right through me,
as she explained what was wrong.
"Why did you have to go so soon?
Our love was so special and strong."
"I'm standing right here, can't you see?
I haven't gone anywhere!"
All of a sudden, something grabbed me,
and I was flying through the air.
I was terrified but tried to be brave.
This flight was so intense!
When I stopped, I looked down at my grave,
and now all this madness makes sense.
Copyright ©
RonMiller
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2004-06-21 18:59:07]
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Re: ~Flight~
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 07:07:10 PM AEST
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ooooo! excellent! i got chills! lol, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: ~Flight~
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by SnowB on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 07:12:19 PM AEST
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Ron...I love the story you have told with this piece!...keeps you guessing up to the very end!...I love your unique style of writing....simply brilliant!
Always friends..........Lena
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Re: ~Flight~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 08:36:47 PM AEST
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| haha just like sixth sense |
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Re: ~Flight~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 08:39:52 PM AEST
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| NIce job with the suspense - I was unsure at first whether it would be a dream or death. |
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Re: ~Flight~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 09:30:53 PM AEST
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It seemed very vague and I couldn't understand why until the end. You carried the whole thing through extremely well. Enjoyable piece of work.
Rita |
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Re: ~Flight~
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by thumper on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 09:54:48 PM AEST
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This was great. Good rhythm and the ending made it just that much better. Good job.
Thumps ; 0 ) |
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