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Four Years Ago
Contributed by
hooray_its_jen
on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 12:26:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Four years ago
I saw you
Stop
And sink,
Down
To the bottom of
The pool.
I saw you
Taken out
By the lifeguards
And then
You dissappeared
From view
As people crowded around you.
I didn't even want
To push my way
Through them,
I was
Scared.
I couldn't move,
I couldn't breathe,
I couldn't see
Through the tears
Welling up
In my eyes.
So I sat there
Waiting
Until the ambulence came.
Five hours later
You were sleeping.
No,
Not dead,
Just sleeping.
You woke up
And said something,
Then went back
To sleep.
No,
This time
It wasn't sleep.
You were
Dead.
I just can't believe
It's been
Four years.
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2004-06-21 12:26:40]
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Re: Four Years Ago
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 01:55:18 PM AEST
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wow, this is very sad...It brought tears to my eyes...because I have many accidents to go through dealing with drowning I near drowned when I was younger and a few years ago I lost my brother and neice to a drowning...and its just so sad they had to go through that...Im so sorry for you...I just know how you feel losing someone you care about...its a dread and a hard thing to get through...and it sux cuz I remember it so perfectly well I wish you the best of luck keep your head held high...
keep it up keep it coming
read and comment my stuff if you want id love to hear what you think...
much love,
Dani
p.s. a great write very very sad however... |
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Re: Four Years Ago
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 02:57:21 PM AEST
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Sweetie, I am so sorry for the loss of your sister. I know how hard it is to lose a sibling as I lost my brother a few years ago. My heart goes out to you. Your poem about her death is sad but shows how hard you took it. I know you realize that there is a reason or God would not have taken her.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: Four Years Ago
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by Kie on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 03:03:23 PM AEST
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My heart goes out to you. Your pain and anguish cried out in this poem. If there is anything I can do please let me know.
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Re: Four Years Ago
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 10:24:11 AM AEST
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This is heart shaking. My eyes are wide open now. Want to tell me the story? What a write! You have given a glimpse that tells much and yet leaves the reader desperate for more. Well done.
Stitch |
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Re: Four Years Ago
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by starlight_dancer on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 04:15:54 AM AEST
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| Jenna, this is such a sad but beatiful write. it's made me think so much. Take care and remember that God is always with you. You know where I am if you need to talk. Remember that x x x |
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Re: Four Years Ago
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by lovespoetic0518 on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 09:46:26 AM AEST
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ok that was soooo sad. And I almost started to tear up but i contained myself. That must have been such a hard experience for you to go through. And what a great way to express your distraught. This was very well put together. Your poems have alot of depth and feeling in them. You have talent.
Kimberly :) |
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