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The War Field
Contributed by
Dying_angel_2
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Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 09:04:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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I would be afraid to come home
In fear of what I might see there
I would hide in my room
Like a bomb shelter it would protect me from WW3 outside
But bombs are loud and I would hear them crashing on to my mothers neck like it was the war field
He was the soldier
She was the civilian
As he fought
She felt the pain
Then one night the war reached its climax
The soldiers bomb exploded killing the civilian
He didnt care
He climbed the hill to find the next civilian
But I had already fled.
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2004-06-20 09:04:16]
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Re: The War Field
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by 01_zanzebar on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 09:21:59 AM AEST
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fantastic usage of dialect and possitioning, more lenght and i could of given 5/5, thisis one hell of a good peice, fantastic, well done
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Re: The War Field
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by Pyrofungus on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 06:12:32 PM AEST
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thats so sad...great job
please comment on my work too
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Re: The War Field
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by wakegurl77 on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 11:37:24 AM AEST
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great write.... so tragic...
Allways Sincere
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