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Forgotten Pain
Contributed by
chimo
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Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 11:18:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Rotten wings, bring rotten things
In the darkness, nothing stings
Hide the stain, leave the pain
Forgotten words said in vain
Time flys by, I wonder why
How could it be, the way you treated me
Want forgivness now, but I dont know how
Live and die in your empty life somehow
Starving for attention, you create the tension
Brings us all down, makes us all frown
Ruins every moment, never hear atonement
You create your misery, & you create the pain
Copyright ©
chimo
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2004-06-19 23:18:19]
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Re: Forgotten Pain
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 11:38:04 PM AEST
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Very nice, I liked it and the rhyming was good. I just like free verse but the random rhyming wasn't bad at all.
Great write
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Re: Forgotten Pain
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by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 01:13:59 AM AEST
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nice! this flows great and you used some creative rhyming tecniques. really good poem here. A++++
loking forward to more posts in the future.... |
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Re: Forgotten Pain
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by wikedladi on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 10:57:05 PM AEST
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NIce one baby! sounds like some family problems. its got great ryming sceme!
love you |
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