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All You Are.
Contributed by
betty
on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 04:39:39 PM in AEST
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You think he's worthy
so you sacrifice yourself.
He pats you on the head
you go down on your knees
slitting your wrists everyday
hoping anyone will notice
how much blood you spill
is all you're worth.
when all you are
you leave up to him,
a lame attempt at being
something someone
might respect.
the loss of blood
makes you weak
so you roll over
and play dead
desperately clinging
to a little boy
who thinks you're
S**T.
Copyright ©
betty
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2004-06-19 16:39:39]
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Re: All You Are.
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by babyboobooangel on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 05:25:43 PM AEST
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this is a very god write a lot of meening and feeling has been written into this poem
very good write
enjoyed it//Terry |
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Re: All You Are.
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 06:23:44 PM AEST
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WELCOME TO YPDC Betty,,,, you will love it her.....we're like one big family......and everyone loves every poet dear!
I will give you a very honest opnion of this write. You are very good, indeed, and what you wrote about is so sad........don't let him do that to you......you don't need that in your your life! Tell him to take a Hike.
And thank you so much for commenting on my poem Common Sense
lovingcritters
ConSue to every here.
Loved your poem!
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Re: All You Are.
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by aernby on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 09:46:15 PM AEST
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good write
you draw two interesting porraits
the girl described
and
the narrator's attiude towards her
aern+ |
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Re: All You Are.
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 10:43:12 PM AEST
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wow, that was very deep and filled with anger...keep you head held high as I will do the same...
much love,
Dani |
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Re: All You Are.
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 11:23:36 PM AEST
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Very nice and lots of feeling in this I loved it and am just in awe.
I don't know who said this quote but its what I try to keep in mind when things aren't great.
" See a day that is coming, not the day that is gone."
Again, very nicely done.
~Kris~ |
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Re: All You Are.
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by Rhei76 on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 12:13:37 PM AEST
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Phat
Good write
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