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Pain
Contributed by
vampire
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Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 04:49:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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My pain is strong
Can´t go on
I must die
I won´t say goodbye!
Pain and cry
But I won´t die
I´m blind
nothing left to find!
I´m going to stand and cry
Till the day I die
I won´t pray
Before the day I die.
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2004-06-18 04:49:45] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 05:27:46 AM AEST (User
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short and very dark, good poem
pixie xx |
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Re: Pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by frejya on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 07:08:39 AM AEST (User
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sorry to say so but i find many lines not interrelated
1st u say u must die then u say u wont die then u wait 4 ur death
"Pain and cry
But I won´t die"
cry and die are verbs but pain is a noun
u cuda made it
"in pain i'll cry
but i won't die"
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though i do get wut ur trying to say. vampire, u can make out meaning out of anything and everything as much as i know i can write poems first n then make it mean
well thts true
even in ur poem i can say ur talking out confusion, u cant decide if u wanna live or die
if tht really is wut u r trying 2 show then ignore my death comment which i think probably isnt the situation |
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Re: Pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 03:55:38 AM AEST (User
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short and to the point
michelle |
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