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Forgotten Chords
Contributed by
Black13
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Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 11:53:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I've laid here for the last hour
staring at the ceiling entranced
listening to lost chords in full power
dreaming of how forever eyes danced.
Feel your whispery touch on my face
and kisses lustfully searing this flesh
as you move your body with heaven's unbound grace
while my eyes close in delicate fantasies mesh.
Cool fingertips outline me, ecstasy unleashed
steaming sultry sighs from unabashed lips
in fevered rush on scintilatingly cashed
words caressing like butterfly kisses given in sips.
My heart flutters in it's rhyme when tongues tease
tied together on eternal altars at star rise
bathed in moonlight twining together in silent pleas
as waves gentle lapping transform to breaking sighs.
Soulful siren songs twist enchanting
minds to echo dire needs accepting release
as favored thoughts float reinventing
amber fields and azure skies with ease.
Copyright ©
Black13
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2004-06-17 23:53:08]
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 12:19:22 AM AEST
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Bravo! I like this, as it has a, well, restraint to it, and a sensitivity. Which I think is cool. Very poetic, as it should be. Nice work!
*whistles and walks away nonchalantly*
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by venkat on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 04:34:47 AM AEST
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Beautiful poetry..it like these lines:
"My heart flutters in it's rhyme when tongues tease..tied together on eternal altars at star rise..bathed in moonlight twining together in silent pleas..as waves gentle lapping transform to breaking sighs"..
marvelous..venkat
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by thumper on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 04:58:06 AM AEST
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All I have to say is I've got to go take a cold shower!! Very.......ummmm......poetic. Seriously, this was suggestive without being lewd! Very nice wording and flow. I enjoyed this immensely!Uh....now for that shower........
Thumps ; 0 ) |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by pixie on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 06:04:50 AM AEST
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wow, this is amazing.
pixie xx |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 06:47:09 AM AEST
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| this is awesome jeff!, very sensual. |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Kie on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 08:13:22 AM AEST
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This is soft, sensual, beautiful poetry.
The first and last stanza's were my favorites but all were excellent.
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by brigitte7735 on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 11:47:29 AM AEST
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hehehe gorgeous, such a blushing girly smile on my face as i avert my eyes from the computer screen, gonna have to go back and read it again when im not at work
Always,
Vanessa ( 090404 ) |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 12:14:47 PM AEST
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My my, Jeff.
Beautiful. very.
I dont totally know what it is about,
i would guess there are hidden meanings in it somwhere,
but im dumb today so i dont know.
Like i said, this is very beautiful.
"Soulful siren songs twist enchanting
minds to echo dire needs accepting release
as favored thoughts float reinventing
amber fields and azure skies with ease.!
i adore that.
Amazing write.
*hugs* phil xxx
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 08:58:50 PM AEST
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Quite a write, my friend. Very impressive. This genre certainly is your forte.
Stitch |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 06:40:41 AM AEST
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An impressively emotive write.
It was enjoyable and absorbing.
Well done. |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 04:43:26 PM AEST
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wow man were u fantasizing or what. In any case this was a beautiful poem very erotically and passionately written. I wish I was only blessed with half as much talent as yerself.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 09:13:45 PM AEST
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| Very well written , I could almost hear the music myself. |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 11:07:25 AM AEST
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| How wonderfully full of sensuality you are. It is a gift to be able to express without hesitation or restraint. I thoroughly enjoyed this work, and found myself immersed. |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 01:06:57 PM AEST
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Hooooboy! What more can I say? I know what you're saying, and well, HOOBOY! What your mind has woven here is awesome!
Angel always...joni |
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Re: Forgotten Chords
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by wray on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 04:41:52 AM AEST
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| Wow I don't think there are many people who can write erotic poetry in such an enchanting way. I love the 2nd last stanza, the way you could mingle and blur the line between the lovers' act and this magical moonlit night. Very cool :) |
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