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11:11
Contributed by
rhei76
on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 09:54:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
dedicatedpoems
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I seen 11:11
Three times today
I miss you heaven
My star over the bay
In two months from today
Your father lost his daughter
4years ago
3 months after may
When my son was 4 months 4 days
You never met him to my dismay
Now when he's 4 year 4 months & 4 days
It will be 4 years
since i've last seen you, heaven
I seen 11:11
Three times today
I miss you heaven
On Jason's birthday
When Nevada took you away
We cried for seven days
And on Devon's & Chads birthday
Chad's boy was two
Seven days after you
On the day Chad turned 23
Seven days after you
I miss you heaven
I seen 11:11
Three times today
I've missed you heaven
All along the way
Listening to your soft whispers
In the sun & the rain
I can't forget my muse
When I see signs everyday
I miss you more than self today
Always dreaming of you in this way
As 2 months today
Will 4 years I hate
I seen 11:11
Three times today
I miss you heaven
Ever since that day
In may my cousin past away
I was reading Timothy Leary
& studing the Tibetan way
Then before the funeral came
I went & sat on a bench that
Had my dads name
I sat there smoking a bowl
In the center of the cemetary
I looked down with a strange
Sense of energy as I witnessed
The tombstone of Bennie
Laid in ground
His birthday was the same as mine
As his deathday was one day after yours
I feel fine
I feel okay
I watch for signs everyday
I feel fine
I feel okay
But I still miss you today
You always came to me
My heaven that could not stay
I wish you never had to go away
Copyright ©
rhei76
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2004-06-17 21:54:21]
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Re: 11:11
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by LittleWillow on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 10:02:14 PM AEST
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| This made me cry! I'm so sorry. |
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Re: 11:11
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by pixie on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 06:24:05 AM AEST
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wow
pixie xx |
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Re: 11:11
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 07:03:36 AM AEST
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| the rhyme seems a little forced here... there's a bit too much of it on one word and it gets a little boring...would have been better free verse style -- just my opinion -- take it or leave it. |
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Re: 11:11
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by emystar on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 09:24:40 PM AEST
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I know I don't need to tell u how sad this is 'cause u r living it.
I'm so sorry for your loss.
Good writing.
luv, huggs,,
emy
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