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My Confused Mistake
Contributed by
Living_In_My_Dream
on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 04:44:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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This heart
My heart
is broken
yet I
stand there
and I
haven't spoken
you have
taken it
beaten it
thrown it
all away
please, please
just stay
you helped
me try
and find
the way
the other
resentful day
but now
you leave
me on
the floor
crying, crying
not wanting
anything more
what did
I do
not to
deserve you?
tell me
now what
is it
I can
possibly do?
after all
you put
me through...
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Living_In_My_Dream
... [
2004-06-17 16:44:15]
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Re: My Confused Mistake
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by holderofthestone on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 01:27:27 AM AEST
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| people say dont be so hard on yourself, but its hard not to be when you think your responsible... I really loved this write. this format is one of my favorites, and you did a great job!! A+++++ |
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Re: My Confused Mistake
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by nabokovfan87 on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 07:57:33 PM AEST
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hey,
Thanks for the comment. i actually clicked on a few poems and noticed something not only on this poem of yours but another one. lemme just say this. its good just whenever u want somebody to like take a breath ro whatever when they r reading it make it a whole line. this way they dont read it wrong. this poem can be made a lot better. all u have to do is change the way it is written. not the words. well there r two u can take out but yea. just make sure it reads liek u want it too. thanks again later.. |
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Re: My Confused Mistake
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by BuRnEd_ChiK on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 06:18:28 PM AEST
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This poem almost imitates the feelings that had come over me and I really thought it had a lot of emotion. Its good and thanx for commmenting on my poem. Feelings are good to express, i say. well gotta to get to writing another one! peace out!
Lots of Love.
Heather |
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Re: My Confused Mistake
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 07:45:49 PM AEST
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We never do hun. It's love, and it makes us crazy. We let our guard down and make ourselves open and weak and vulnerable. Love is good and bad. :(
Lindsey |
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