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Daily Struggle
Contributed by
pixie
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Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 11:32:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I wake up with my daily struggle,
My head messed up and in a muddle,
I am trying so hard to finally love me,
Hoping that soon I will see what others see.
I have my good days and my bad,
For my brighter days I am so glad,
But my dark days hit me so hard,
Leave me beaten, and eternally scarred.
I want to feel happy all the time,
And never have to figure out these rhymes,
Rhymes that dance about in my mind,
Always answers I am searching to find.
Like why did I suffer so much,
Why was I not handed more luck,
Why I have a daily battle,
Why depression makes my innards rattle.
I can not answer any of these,
I still need help& I ask you please,
Please see past my angry words,
Witness the cries that need to be heard.
Although I like to think I’m tough,
There are times when I’ve had enough,
And need one of your nice, warm hugs,
When my worries are too hard for me to shrug.
It has the ability to wear me down,
Turn my happy smile into a pained frown,
Knocks me back down the ladder,
Swiftly kicks me in the bladder.
Until I just can’t bear it anymore,
And I am knocking on the door,
The door that can take away my pain,
No longer in my world would it rain.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2004-06-17 11:32:30]
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by MDodgen on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 11:40:25 AM AEST
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great poem, i'm cronic depressive so i understand your feelings. wonderful wording.
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by lexxie on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 12:01:58 PM AEST
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beautiful powerful poem i know how your feeling nice rythem
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by Luinil on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 12:33:58 PM AEST
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| i understand what you're goin' through.. your rhymes are really interesting and have a great rhythm to them * |
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 01:25:25 PM AEST
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Pixie, you must have terrible struggles in your life.......I'm so sorry. but don't pick up where others left off making life so sorry for you......get a clean start.......wipe your slate clean......start completely over.......and don't dwell on your past. That's what I did after many many years or torture and abuse as a child.......and I am happy each day.....and it will last.
Beautifully written poem........I love your poetry.
love,
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by Kie on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 01:49:46 PM AEST
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I liked the way you rhymed this poem.
I also thought it was written well and gives a glimpse of your talent.
If you ever feel like talking let me know. Struggles can be hard and I hope yours gets easier. :) |
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by yellow_sundragon on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 06:18:42 PM AEST
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ahhh.... another member of the depression fan club.... (hmmm.... *has a brainstorm for a poem).... I know where you're at, I'm there too.. somewhere stuck in the middle, you know what you don't want, but can't seem to get to where you need to be...
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 08:33:44 PM AEST
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| Oh yeah we all go through struggles like these and I think you did a fabulous job in putting these obstacles in words. The rhymes used were fine and it enabled the poem to flow really well. Great job. |
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by bernard on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 01:29:59 AM AEST
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Hello Pixie. I think that all poets suffer from a form of depression there are days for all of us where nothing but nothing will go right it is then that we get weighed down with thoughts of catastrophies that could happen. I said, could they most likely will not. great poem though I give it top marks in an effort to cheer you up.
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by SnowB on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 07:23:13 AM AEST
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Very intense emotions you have expressed in this piece..nice flow and the rhyme is awesome...great poem.
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by krisseee on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 10:25:04 AM AEST
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yet another good write that i enjoyed reading.
keep it up |
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Re: Daily Struggle
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 12:02:02 AM AEST
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Wow I love your writing and it has such emotions that are overwhelming and I can feel your pain. Very nicely done and awesome write.
~Kris~ |
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