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her music
Contributed by
taintedorange21
on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 01:48:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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my skin met hers and we dared
to dance in the night
a dance i never danced before
one i'd never have danced
if the moment weren't right
her hair drapes over her face
hiding the imperfections
that maker her more than beautiful
so i moved her hair
in hopes i'll be able to handle
all the beauty that is her
i can't ...she's so...
her body forms to mine
she ins to my outs
like a puzzle to it's pieces
and it's more than divine
how we so deeply intertwined
though she was the 1st of this kind
i've ever had
i feel i need no other music but hers
and could keep dancing
cuz she is rythm
and i'm her rhymes
i kiss her body and the light
from her broken window
hit's her hazel green eyes
and i...i'm speechless
she was the first i repeat
to show love of this kind
and my mind hesitates but is blown
there's 2 ways to take this...hope you enjoy!
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taintedorange21
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2004-06-15 13:48:32]
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Re: her music
(User Rating: 1 )
by n2dep2care on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 07:09:15 PM AEST
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beautiful poem, wispy and free. excellent wording. I think the rhythm is a bit fast, breaking it into stanzas would give it a better pace. This needs to be read slowly to take in all its meaning. VERY well done- bravo!
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Re: her music
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by HighOnRomanticore on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 06:19:33 PM AEST
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Fabulous.
Wonderful.
Two say bravo. |
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