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To My Imaginary Fans
Contributed by
Ina
on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 10:44:01 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Do you like my poetry?
Do you like the way it flies
through plastic windows
and leaves kisses on you rug?
Do I sound sexy when I write?
Like a hip(y) white girl
with fake pearls and
huge chandelier sunglasses?
Do my words shock you?
Do you have to check your pantry
to make sure they exist?
Does my poetry format
remind you of
scrabble rain
falling on trashy novels?
Do my endings leave you drunk
and naked
and in a mood to
drive or make love?
Do I sound like your
girlfriend, or your mistress
or that girl working in Wal-Mart?
Do you want me to write
a poem about you
and title it
“The Cure for Vaginal Yeast Infection?”
Do you want to stab me with
paper airplanes
when I write free verse
and refuse to try traditional?
Do you want to marry me
divorce me
marry me again
hit me
leave me
and forget me?
Do you want me
to write about
failed suicide attempts
depression
and abortions?
Do you want me
to take this poem and stick it
up my ass
so I finally shut up?
Maybe I should find a nice
little rhyme to end this…
(what rhymes with this?)
Kiss Miss P*ss
I am a sell-out.
Copyright ©
Ina
... [
2004-06-14 10:44:01] (Date/Time posted on
site)
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Re: To My Imaginary Fans
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 10:49:30 AM AEST (User
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Interesting write.
"scrabble rain
falling on trashy novels?"
Comment over. |
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Re: To My Imaginary Fans
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 11:03:35 AM AEST (User
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This started out really clever, but it got angry and defensive which spoiled the initial creativity a little bit. I think if you let go of your defensiveness you will really shine.
Nice job |
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Re: To My Imaginary Fans
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 11:06:16 AM AEST (User
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wahey another good poem ... keep em coming
pixie xx |
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Re: To My Imaginary Fans
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ina on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 11:11:35 AM AEST (User
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Thank you guys, and i wasnt necessarily being defensive I was playing around. Youre right though that "stick it up my ass" part is a little too harsh.
You should see the reaction thsi poem got on the poetry site where I am a Moderator.
Stepping over some lines.
Thank you very much. |
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Re: To My Imaginary Fans
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:45:52 PM AEST (User
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I like this you have covered everything great job
michelle |
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Re: To My Imaginary Fans
(User Rating: 1 ) by reilt on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:53:31 PM AEST (User
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wow ina...a great write. i love this one. |
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