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The next one
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:14:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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you contribute to my greater cause
your infectious disease of decay
you held the key to my heart
but you let the lock rust away
years of neglect, not being used
has wrecked its mechanisms
your riddling words, puzzling actions
all wrapped up in strange enigmas
free me now , with answers why
just tell me of your reasons
Ive wondered why for many years
season after season
your devices create pain
they work as you intended
you infiltrated my thoughts
the ways that you pretended
I guess I did something wrong
I might have missed my cue
I know because if not
I wouldnt be writing this to you
I want to hear the words
so I know what should be done
so I can make the changes
and be a different one
I need you to show me
or tell me what to do
so the next one I love
doesnt walk out just like you
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Re: The next one
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:31:55 AM AEST
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POWERFUL!!!...I loved this...very emotional filled with your deepest feelings and it flowed so well...I hope you are moving on and looking forwar dto it...the world has so many great people...but Im not saying you wont meet any bad ones...great write I loved it...
"you contribute to my greater cause
your infectious disease of decay
you held the key to my heart
but you let the lock rust away
years of neglect, not being used
has wrecked its mechanisms"
wow very great lines...keep it up you good witer you....lol
much love,
Dani
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Re: The next one
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by pixie on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 08:34:28 AM AEST
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this is a very powerful poem, you expressed your pain well,
pixie xx |
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Re: The next one
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by MDodgen on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:32:39 PM AEST
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| beautiful write, the words flowed well. good job. |
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Re: The next one
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by Calista on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 01:36:33 AM AEST
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im trying to think of the words to use for the way i feel about your writing. irrisistable. you, Holder, have magic in your mind and heart to create such a wondeful piece, as all of your others.
"you held the key to my heart
but you let the lock rust away"
that line made me want to smile and moan at the same time. you are unique and beautiful in your writing. thank you,
Calista
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