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Purgatory
Contributed by
betty
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Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 03:04:37 AM in AEST
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Logic is your enemy
Hatred your lover
Thoughts are mere wishes
Irrationallity a god.
Finally
Stangled by your own hands.
there is no heaven or hell here
only emptiness.
Close your eyes child
There is no escape.
Take a deep breath my dear
This is never ending.
Copyright ©
betty
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Re: Purgatory
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by Merry on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 06:54:49 AM AEST
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interesting write - i do not believe in hell or purgatory - I believe there is only oneness and it is only achieved after many trials - i would not want to go to purgatory, sounds very frustrating
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Re: Purgatory
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 10:45:16 AM AEST
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Oooh, nice . . . sometimes simplicity, succinctness (errr . . . whatever ya call it) gives a poem a lot more impact. So 'tis here, certainly. It's rather different (in a sense) from your other two but by no means in a bad way.
I've always thought oblivion would be more a hell than what so many call hell . . . a concept which you captured beautifully here. I especially liked the use of the "my child", etc. epithets . . . I love the tinge of irony they add to this piece.
I quite like the line of irrationality being a god, but (sorry, my nitpicky side) the misspelling detracts juuuust a little . . . there's a setting where you can have the mods spellcheck your poetry; maybe you could try that? Well, sorry to nitpick. 'Tis quite good over all.
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Re: Purgatory
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 11:13:02 PM AEST
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I liked it and this said lots in the short amount but it was just perfect and I love your wording.
Finally
Stangled by your own hands.
there is no heaven or hell here
only emptiness.
Amazing and very well done!
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Re: Purgatory
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 05:35:15 PM AEST
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WOW, that was amazing please I loved this keep it up...
much love,
Dani
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