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Friday
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 02:47:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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When your name is tongued
with gentle affection
When your music is strummed
with lasting emotion
When in comfortabke silence
there is no gloom
but your shadow resting
quiet next to me
Is when I feel you
most alive
It makes me smile,
swamped in melancholy
In the warm rush
of memories.
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Avarice_Riot
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by Crow on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 03:16:48 AM AEST (User
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this is sad, might make you want to have a double-bourbon and a fire going. the poem sets me there. very good write...Crow |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by Overstated on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 05:29:38 AM AEST (User
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stunning piece of poetry really well written loved the line - 'When your music is strummed
with lasting emotion' - thought that was ace!! well done |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by arden on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 07:41:51 AM AEST (User
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this was a beautiful, sad write.
so few words for such an amazing piece of work.
i loved this one.
post more soon.
Arden |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 07:53:25 AM AEST (User
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This is the first poem of your that i have read since you came back.
i must say i have also missed your poetry,
and i am glad to see that your writes are as amazing as ever.
I love this. I just love the way it flows, the words, everything.
glad you are back
*hugs to you*
phil xxx |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by blueheart on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 08:27:16 AM AEST (User
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I found this to be quite sad. Wriiten with beautiful words that capture well placed emotions. |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by wray on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:54:07 AM AEST (User
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I was going to say what Overstated said!
If you're swamped in melancholy because she's only memories now, then this really is a beautiful, sad piece, but either way it really touches me - in a sadly yearning, choked-up kind of way. |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:24:42 AM AEST (User
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Poignant piece of work. Emotions clearly stated and felt deeply. I have missed you and your work and I welcome you back home.
Rita |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:16:50 AM AEST (User
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A dazzling piece poetry..it shines with a smile and heaves a heavy sigh..your deep feelings
we can see..well done my friend.. venkat |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by Baronhawk on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 07:00:10 AM AEST (User
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Your write herein captures to me at least a state that we often enter into cued by whatever it is that triggers our need to slip into the timelessness of our memories. Sometimes of pain and other times of laughter this tracing of the pasts that we often fall into especially remembering lost sorrows... I too sometimes fall into this state...to remember old times and days gone by...like that first love...that happy laughter or those rare pearls of tears.. to this day I too still remember my first love... she no longer holds power over my but those memories can be unnerving at times... of this event you have captured here briefly in your write. Quite nice i would say.
"Wide awake or fast asleep... on that special cue I would fall in state...into that dream of what was before..into that gentle clasp of distant memories.." |
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Re: Friday
(User Rating: 1 ) by Broken_Skin on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 05:38:40 AM AEST (User
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Well... arent you quite a poet..
*Is very jealous* |
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