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Shadow of Loneliness
Contributed by
teethgrinder
on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 10:06:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Why do your fierce claws persist in piercing me?
Why does your cumbersome shadow suffocate the tranquility,
Why do your parasites eat away and hollow out my happiness?
And refill the hole with this unbearable emptiness?
The power fizzles out and I sense your presence around me,
You silence the phone and push everyone away from me,
Cigarette smoke swirling, creating images of his forgotten face,
That dispersed into nothing in my mind's ashtray of waste.
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teethgrinder
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2004-06-12 10:06:57]
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Re: Shadow of Loneliness
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by pixie on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 10:24:07 AM AEST
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I really liked this. never come across anything from you beofre, but I like what I have seen so far..
pixie xx |
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Re: Shadow of Loneliness
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by Archie on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:05:01 AM AEST
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| That is a perfect definition of loneliness if I ever saw one. 5 stars |
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Re: Shadow of Loneliness
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 04:44:50 PM AEST
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good poem I liked the mood you put in this poem as well as the emotion and I loved the last line with 'mind's ashtray of waste' friggin awesome.
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Re: Shadow of Loneliness
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by satanssecret1369 on
Saturday, 19th December 2009 @ 12:34:33 PM AEST
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"Cigarette smoke swirling, creating images of his forgotten face,
That dispersed into nothing in my mind's ashtray of waste."
Couldn't have said it better. |
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