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my door
Contributed by
purplestary
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Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 04:17:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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my door stays shut,
locked and bolted
noones seen the other side.
I know that this
can't last forever
i have to open up someday,
and let somebody in.
It's not that i don't want to.
It's just a matter of fear.
fear of unacceptance
and of vulnerability.
I think that i am ready now,
to take a risk
and learn to live.
so if you're ever passing through
feel free to stop on by.
and if you knock but nooone answers
please be sure to knock again.
I've been locked inside for
so da** long,
i'm probably burried deep within.
so forgive me if
it takes some time
to make it to the door.
but whatever happens,
don't give up,
I promise i'll be home.
I need you to stick around,
don't leave me to myself.
It's getting hard to breath in here,
please help me unlock the door.
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Re: my door
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by LiquidChaos on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 04:35:35 PM AEST
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thats cool how you used a reality as a metaphore...while still talking about the door as a real thing...if that makes any sense. i understood it before i wrote it anyways...at any rate, good poem. i really like this. keep it up and don't let fear hold you back.
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Re: my door
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by eatfresh22 on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 04:51:56 PM AEST
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I'm glad that you've realized that you're fear shouldn't keep you from living life.
I think that i am ready now,
to take a risk
and learn to live.
I liked those lines. Good luck getting to the door. I know you'll find the strength. Good poem. It was very heartfelt!
~Carrie~
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Re: my door
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by yellow_sundragon on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 06:40:00 PM AEST
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*knock knock*
Jaime |
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Re: my door
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by Princesaazul16 on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 08:42:27 PM AEST
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Beautiful. So deep and strong. I loved it. I understand how you feel. If you ever need to talk..im here. Keep writing, you did a very good job. I loved it.
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Re: my door
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by teethgrinder on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 08:56:35 AM AEST
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I liked this poem. I like the way you have used an extended metaphor to describe your feelings and situation and i think the last two lines sum it all up well.
*pix*
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Re: my door
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:20:17 PM AEST
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stands next to jaime and hey hey we have cookies:) great write, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: my door
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 04:44:49 PM AEST
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Wow, what a great poem......you will always be all right PS because you are truthful with yourself! Never stop being true to you, and the you soar to the skies with little adeu'
Your door is going to open even wider after you gain your self esteem back. That's always what negative mothers aim for.....is your self esteem........and then when you find you are not so bad.......the door opens wide to let everyone in.
I'll be knocking one of these days to bring you nothing but love and hugs and encouragement!
lovingcritters
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Re: my door
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by WereCat on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 08:56:48 PM AEST
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Hi. Remember me? I snuck in through the window a while back and got lost. I’ve been living in the closet. It’s good I found you, I’ve got shovels. We better hurry someone said cookies.
-Love Cat
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