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Sleep
Contributed by
jishes_4_ever
on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 12:10:52 PM in AEST
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The fear inside is building up
There's no more room left for me to cry
My breath begins to shorten
And suddenly I can not breath.
I don't know what's happening to me.
I hear someone say
Hello? I need an ambulance
There's been some sort of accident!
I here the phone being slamed down.
Somone is talking to me
Are you okay?
Can you hear me?
Stay with me!
But I can't stay
The pain is to much.
In the distance I hear the ambulance comming
And I try to hang on
But they arn't fast enough
And I slowly begin to drift into sleep
A sleep that never ends.
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2004-06-11 12:10:52]
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Re: Sleep
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by RhythmBndt on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 12:15:30 PM AEST
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| Very good detail. You did a great job of describing what the poem is about without coming straight out & saying so. |
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Re: Sleep
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by pixie on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 12:28:11 PM AEST
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Good poem, I liked this alot
pixie xx |
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Re: Sleep
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by bitson_2005 on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 02:21:40 PM AEST
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| Good Write |
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