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Four
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 04:48:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
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One walks in shadows under cloudy skies
The next stays inside keeping sun from her eyes
The little one dances through thunderstorm
And I, for the tornado, am airborne
The four of us, all seeking shelter now
Know nature is strong but we’ll only allow
Raindrops to fall when each other is near
Drawing together for comfort as storms appear
The skies keep tumbling overhead
Rainbows may come when the hurricane’s dead
Gathering property that’s been strewn about
We wait for the sun to force itself out
Clouds will break, an answer for one
With reason enough, another will seek the sun
When thunder settles, the little one moves on
And I, will land, somewhere by dawn
Clouds, sunlight, tornado and thunder
Spells of nature is not all that we’re under
Though stormy words I have used above
This tale is not of nature - but of love
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Re: Four
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by pixie on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 05:04:35 PM AEST
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This is a really lovely poem, great job,
pixie xx |
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Re: Four
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 10:12:05 PM AEST
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It sounds like you each use the strength of each other to exist. That is tremendous. That is what friends and families do. This is a great write.
Rita |
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Re: Four
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by yellow_sundragon on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 06:22:02 PM AEST
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This made me smile... I wish I had three other people I could always depend on... you're very lucky....
I like your idea, to use a storm as a metaphor for you and your friends... it worked...
Jaime |
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Re: Four
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by holderofthestone on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 07:34:48 PM AEST
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| its great to have someone to rely on. very nice poem sweet emotions and lovely wording. A++++ |
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Re: Four
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:25:34 AM AEST
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Nice work! This reminds me of the top secret poet society I am a part of, which I cannot tell you anything more about! Such friendship is a wonderful thing.
I love the ending. Keep it up!
Andrew |
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Re: Four
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by Stitch on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 09:37:41 AM AEST
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Yes, I can relate. Lovely words. Well expressed.
Stitch |
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Re: Four
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by MDodgen on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 03:22:03 PM AEST
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| good symbolism. i think we all have to be opposites to get along. nice write. |
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Re: Four
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 05:21:40 PM AEST
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I guess that is love. The destruction after the storm. The calm before it. And everything in between. Great write, SNM. I am definitely a fan.
Lindsey |
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Re: Four
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by ShadowDaughter on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 09:32:07 PM AEST
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Positively effulgent . . . what a great poem. When people are blessed with friendships like these, the world's just a little bit brighter for everyone.
Flowed very easily, too . . .
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Re: Four
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 03:47:45 PM AEST
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beautifully flowing style, and i adore your ending, very sweet:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Four
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 12:49:48 PM AEST
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yes Ihad to read it too. :)
What a wonderful analogy!
I can see how lucky you are,
I hope they know how lucky they are... |
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Re: Four
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 07:03:24 PM AEST
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| Very nice Snemmers!!!! |
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