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Heaven
Contributed by
Hurretje
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Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 02:11:50 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Every night and
Sometimes even in daylight
When I am all by myself
In the middle of a crowd
I hear your soft voice
In my room and
Sometimes in fields of emerald
When I am covered
By a blanket of flowers
I scent your rosy hair
In photo albums and
Sometimes even at the bottom of a bottle
When I am drifting
On insensible clouds of oblivion
I feel your warm embrace
Where have you gone
As the sun travels
From East to West
Each day again
Through the empty sky
Where have you gone
As slowly
Your odor leaves your clothes
For no safe to keep
The colors of your picture
Is there a fourth dimension?
Can we call it time?
There must be
Because in my dreams
We dance under baby stars
Is there a parallel universe?
Can we get there?
There must be
Because at night you reach out for me
Only for my eyes to see
Is there Heaven?
Can we can on it?
There must be
Because in my heart
You wait for me
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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2004-06-10 02:11:50]
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Re: Heaven
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by holderofthestone on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 02:17:51 AM AEST
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| ....... you should read some of my works, you will see I relate with this poem. I like your choice words and rhymes, good write! A++++ |
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Re: Heaven
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by venkat on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 02:24:13 AM AEST
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| Most beautifully written..excellent and heart touching..sure. this is one of your best..Oh. I like its read..marvelous...venkat |
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Re: Heaven
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by emystar on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 02:27:36 AM AEST
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A bit sad but greatly written. It's thought provoking.
Great job.
luv, huggs, hope,
emy |
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Re: Heaven
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by Hurretje on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 02:35:06 AM AEST
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It had to be:
Is there Heaven?
Can we count on it?
There must be
Because in my heart
You wait for me
Sorry for the inconvenience!
Hur |
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Re: Heaven
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 03:00:16 AM AEST
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Beautiful! Especially the last stanza (even better with the correction...). I love this. And I can sure relate.
Bravo, bravo! Thanks for another great piece.
Andrew |
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Re: Heaven
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 09:30:38 AM AEST
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| Beautiful poem. Very well written. |
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Re: Heaven
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 03:33:33 PM AEST
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This is so beautiful. I do believe in heaven and I believe he is there waiting for me to join him in time. I catch glimpses occasionally in the shadows and hear his voice in the wind. At night he sends me beautiful dreams to remember him by. Thank you for this poem. it is exquisitely touching.
Rita |
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Re: Heaven
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:12:36 PM AEST
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That the same question everyone has been asking for ages. Yes, in deed there is a heaven.......and this poem is so sad.....I don't know your circumstances Hur, but I lost my husband to death many years ago, I had trouble seeing him heaven. I can't believe a loving God would put him up there and he knowing that I'm dying from grief and can't even balance my own checkbook.....with his litle kids crying for him.......How could anyone be happy in heaven knowing they left those behind in constant grief. Those are the questions I have to ask?
Beautiful poem.
love
lovingcritters
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Re: Heaven
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by JennyFruFru on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 10:18:07 AM AEST
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| i like the whole dimension aspect that you describe... i so believe in them... and im glad to see that im not the only one... what an interesting write... and nicely done :) |
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Re: Heaven
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:45:11 AM AEST
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Here again! I reread this with much pleasure. It is one of those...
Ditto everything I said the first time.
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Re: Heaven
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 03:55:45 PM AEST
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breathtakingly beautiful:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Heaven
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by arden on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 09:22:29 AM AEST
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beautifully done, so sad and heartbreaking. wonderfully written. i loved reading this.
gready done.
5 stars.
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Re: Heaven
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by Cynthia on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 10:40:08 PM AEST
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| Hur, this is a nice piece. Beautifully spoken words. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Heaven
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 04:36:23 PM AEST
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Deams should be real!!!! At least that's what I always feel about my most heartfelt dreams. This was great. I like the persistence and conviction. I like your stubborness!
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Heaven
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by StoneAngel on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 10:11:30 AM AEST
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very heart touching, it pulls at your strings. wonderful read. excusitely written.
Angel |
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